The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
Summaries the information by selecting
and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table lists the proportion of various type poverty in Australia households in the year of 1999. It can be seen, the average of all household lived under poverty was about 11% respectively, and among them sole parent was the highest in percentages.
Looking at the detail, sole parent, couple with children and single, no children are dominated as vast majority percentages of proportion family lived under poverty in australia household. They counted over 10% respectively. Besides, there are three other types of family were the lower proportion of poverty. They are namely aged couple, single aged person and couple, no children. Each couple no children and single aged person were about 6% and 7% respectively. Followed by aged couple was the lowest , it counted 4% of proportion lived under poverty.
In conclusion, family types with the sole parents and single persons with no child shows highest percentages live under poverty than aged couple.
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there are three other types of family were the lower proportion of poverty.
there are three other types of family which were in the lower proportion of poverty.
Each couple no children and single aged person
both couple no children and single aged person //both...and...
Followed by aged couple was the lowest , it counted 4% of proportion lived under poverty.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? a lot of errors
family types with the sole parents and single persons with no child shows highest percentages live under poverty than aged couple.
Description: can you re-write this sentence? make sure what is subject, what is verb and object
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2 //you have issues on the structure of sentences. Read a good grammar book and read sample essays.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 9 10
No. of Words: 154 200
No. of Characters: 774 1000
No. of Different Words: 79 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.523 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.026 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.553 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 39 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 23 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 17 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.111 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.903 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.222 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.457 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.614 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 504, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
.... Followed by aged couple was the lowest , it counted 4% of proportion lived under...
^^
Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'shows the highest'.
Suggestion: shows the highest
...arents and single persons with no child shows highest percentages live under poverty than age...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['besides', 'look', 'so', 'in conclusion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.286516853933 0.268076937826 107% => OK
Verbs: 0.134831460674 0.116061578633 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101123595506 0.0759168565197 133% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0337078651685 0.0366838410393 92% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0280898876404 0.0131127313244 214% => OK
Prepositions: 0.140449438202 0.155750635184 90% => OK
Participles: 0.0449438202247 0.0379272487307 119% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.66589825904 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0 0.0210936926555 0% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0842696629213 0.0948980150116 89% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00561797752809 0.00437022459523 129% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0 0.00967000014798 0% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 963.0 1161.00487805 83% => OK
No of words: 155.0 196.9 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.21290322581 5.90752243213 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52844152537 3.73763899035 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.38064516129 0.337110787985 113% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.290322580645 0.247514529752 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.167741935484 0.171178102325 98% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.116129032258 0.112407865282 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66589825904 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548387096774 0.546246751206 100% => OK
Word variations: 44.8133765353 49.3433353143 91% => OK
How many sentences: 9.0 8.93414634146 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.2222222222 23.0094962315 75% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.7014789713 42.9750493124 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 135.714022679 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.2222222222 23.0094962315 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.444444444444 0.689975730869 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.84146341463 78% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.48048780488 135% => OK
Readability: 46.2544802867 47.7609492067 97% => OK
Elegance: 2.4 2.94281807926 82% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.3254935401 0.418131533498 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.172232152727 0.181151798455 95% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.178210004061 0.0850326197045 210% => Ideas in sentences are similar.
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.600697182587 0.706616315825 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.223019322964 0.157042692854 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.168617420882 0.228904883108 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.161735292528 0.108899403657 149% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.340854046684 0.367819155151 93% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0110531806803 0.0812612215331 14% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263400191348 0.316326947829 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.139292712348 0.0921553760075 151% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70731707317 54% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 1.14146341463 613% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.08536585366 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 3.16585365854 32% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 0.956097560976 732% => Less negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 0.0 3.02926829268 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 8.0 7.1512195122 112% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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