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That sports and social activities play a significant role in students’ life is an undeniable fact. Should university chancellors and the people who support academic society financially realize the importance of these sort of activities in a young person’s life, they will ponder over them much more scrupulously. Social activities and sports have recently been the topic of debate among educational experts. I do believe that sports and social activities are as important as educational activities and must get equal financial support and these are my justifications.
“A healthy brain lives in a healthy body.” This is an important issue during a students’ life on a campus. Because during a semester, students are quite busy with their assignments and researches and they might not allocate enough time to do some exercises during the day which is really harmful for their health. So universities and colleges must provide facilities for students to take a part in a favorite sport. And as everybody knows, providing facilities and encouraging students to do sports need money.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that students need to learn social skills during their years of being a student in a university or a college. They may learn how to do a teamwork in a football team or while climbing a mountain. They’ll have the opportunity to learn how to communicate and improve their social relations during social activities like multicultural ceremonies. So these activities are really crucial for the future of the students to promote their abilities to communicate well and work as a team.
Having discussed the issue from that point of view, I would rather look at it from another perspective. Having up-to-date libraries and enough educational equipment are significantly important to help students to research and come up with new ideas during their studying which will help the universities and colleges to be recognized among the scientific society. Providing all these things all together needs a good budget.
By taking all above mentioned arguments into consideration, the following conclusion can be drawn about the issue. Underestimating the significance of sports and social activities in campus life is not logical. Attending to this issue meticulously contributes to a better future for students , and can improve several aspects of their personal lives.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'well', 'while', 'sort of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.258741258741 0.229887763892 113% => OK
Verbs: 0.137529137529 0.158761421928 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0955710955711 0.0866891130778 110% => OK
Adverbs: 0.037296037296 0.046263068375 81% => OK
Pronouns: 0.039627039627 0.0685040099705 58% => OK
Prepositions: 0.114219114219 0.118717715034 96% => OK
Participles: 0.032634032634 0.0351676179071 93% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.10603935411 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.032634032634 0.0309702414327 105% => OK
Particles: 0.002331002331 0.00188951952338 123% => OK
Determiners: 0.109557109557 0.0887237588012 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.02331002331 0.0209618222197 111% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013986013986 0.0139019557991 101% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2438.0 2387.08602151 102% => OK
No of words: 386.0 408.028673835 95% => OK
Chars per words: 6.31606217617 5.86048508987 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.406735751295 0.338922669872 120% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295336787565 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.238341968912 0.174417080927 137% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.173575129534 0.112833075102 154% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10603935411 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533678756477 0.524397521467 102% => OK
Word variations: 59.4157403021 59.2087087015 100% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6684587814 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4444444444 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1346865918 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.444444444 120.699889404 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4444444444 20.5533526081 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.555555555556 0.644075263715 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.54480286738 36% => OK
Readability: 50.9781232009 45.7405998639 111% => OK
Elegance: 1.89130434783 1.45489161554 130% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.300154397459 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104293589889 0.103427244359 101% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0626237929472 0.0752933317313 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.528496593959 0.497263757937 106% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113140399904 0.151897553556 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.114077575197 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0781384742642 0% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.281627876503 0.336927656856 84% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0272779831996 0.067059652881 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.210909579961 0% => The content is off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0618886996521 0% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.91756272401 81% => OK
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 4.0 2.75985663082 145% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 13.6433691756 132% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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