Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
These days, health issues become prominent priority for any governments. The variety of diseases and other health problems encourage the governments to provide better health facilities for society. Many of us assert that increasing the number of sports facilities are the best way to respond this issues, while others argue this notion and opine that there are other indicators which are more important and should get extra attention. To my way of thinking, it is widely believe that sports have big effect to our health; however, integrating to other aspects might be a prudent idea for enhancing public health.
Admittedly, sports are direct link to health. There are many sciences evidences that doing workouts regularly could avoid to various diseases. Running; for example, is believed that helping to control heart rhythms, increasing lung capacities, and putting out toxics through the sweets. Hence, it would improve heart and lung performances which affect to physical health. Furthermore, providing a lot of workouts facilities give an instant access to civilians. In this busy world, people are difficult to reach certain location and cost a lot of time due to heavy traffic jam. Thus, they tend to sit down in front of the television when they have leisure time; in contrast, if workouts facilities are much more convenient, it might encourage people to do some exercises as an other relaxation method.
Apart from those reasons, there is an argument that only minority people would use these workouts facilities. One reason for this is that plenty of people get bored with the same old activities and less commitments to their exercises plans. Research carried out by statistics centre in Adelaide shows that mostly gym annual memberships do not go entirely after one month period. This research makes clear that the availability of workouts facilities do not ensure people to do exercises regularly. In addition, there are other essential aspects for improving public health such as health services. This can be explained by good health services that providing vaccines for against the epidemics, curing someone from diseases, and educating local community to do healthy habit. Local clinics; for instance, play major role to maintain quality of health in their surrounding.
All thinking considered, there can be no doubt that sports have positive influences to physical health; nonetheless, I personally believe that combining with other sectors such as providing good health services is likely to be a wise idea to improve public health efficiently.
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Essay evaluation report
health issues become prominent priority
health issues become the prominent priority
Sentence: Many of us assert that increasing the number of sports facilities are the best way to respond this issues, while others argue this notion and opine that there are other indicators which are more important and should get extra attention.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and issues
it is widely believe that
it is widely believed that
sports have big effect to our health
sports have big effects to our health
sports have a big effect to our health
sports are direct link to health.
sports are direct links to health.
Running; for example, is believed that helping to control heart rhythms
Running; for example, is believed to help control heart rhythms
providing a lot of workouts facilities give an
providing a lot of workouts facilities gives an
This can be explained by good health services that providing vaccines
This can be explained by good health services that are providing vaccines
Sentence: Running; for example, is believed that helping to control heart rhythms, increasing lung capacities, and putting out toxics through the sweets.
Error: toxics Suggestion: ?
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
Pay attention to singular/plural nouns/verbs.
Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 2112 1500
No. of Different Words: 232 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.189 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.578 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 170 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 54 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.421 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.928 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.307 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.089 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 472, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'believed'.
Suggestion: believed
...on. To my way of thinking, it is widely believe that sports have big effect to our heal...
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Line 3, column 430, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'instant access'.
Suggestion: instant access
...iding a lot of workouts facilities give an instant access to civilians. In this busy world, peopl...
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Line 3, column 774, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...ncourage people to do some exercises as an other relaxation method. Apart from those ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 199, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun commitments is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
... bored with the same old activities and less commitments to their exercises plans. R...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['furthermore', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'nonetheless', 'so', 'thus', 'while', 'apart from', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in contrast', 'no doubt', 'such as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.29203539823 0.247107183377 118% => OK
Verbs: 0.159292035398 0.155533422707 102% => OK
Adjectives: 0.101769911504 0.0946595960268 108% => OK
Adverbs: 0.037610619469 0.0501214627716 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0243362831858 0.0437548338989 56% => OK
Prepositions: 0.108407079646 0.122226691241 89% => OK
Participles: 0.0420353982301 0.0403226058552 104% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.69106720308 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0464601769912 0.0326793684256 142% => OK
Particles: 0.00663716814159 0.00163938923432 405% => OK
Determiners: 0.0641592920354 0.0861772015684 74% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0176991150442 0.021408717616 83% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00884955752212 0.011925033212 74% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2574.0 1933.35771543 133% => OK
No of words: 407.0 316.048096192 129% => OK
Chars per words: 6.32432432432 6.12580529183 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20517956788 107% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.427518427518 0.374742101984 114% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.312039312039 0.28420135186 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.228501228501 0.203846283523 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.149877149877 0.137316102897 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69106720308 2.80594681477 96% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 176.037074148 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572481572482 0.56093040696 102% => OK
Word variations: 67.6918954752 60.7387585426 111% => OK
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0891783567 118% => OK
Sentence length: 21.4210526316 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.3550599296 49.517814964 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.473684211 127.492653851 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4210526316 20.7743622355 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.789473684211 0.814263465372 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 3.99599198397 100% => OK
Readability: 52.6249838355 49.1944974215 107% => OK
Elegance: 2.0 1.69124875643 118% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.480309785764 0.332605444948 144% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.104788000227 0.102741220458 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0555470346018 0.0668466124924 83% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.472328918001 0.534860350844 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.162457789715 0.148594505496 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.162660731881 0.134430193775 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778518313588 0.0742795772207 105% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.353764819511 0.324371583561 109% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0613242106023 0.0638462369009 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328043699803 0.228012699653 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0855404683298 0.058150111329 147% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.68436873747 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 10.0 5.90881763527 169% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 10.4468937876 163% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.