Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

Sentence: An earth-shaking question remains whether the hard work and determination are the key factors behind breakthrough of an individual or some other factors.Here, I would like to establish my arguements for both sides with my own perception.
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Sentence: By practicing these efforts, one can be very skilful to obtain towering success.
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Sentence: To illistrate, the dream of Hitler to make German world power was ruined by unexpected cold which was likely to come three months later.
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Sentence: From my notion, a combination of all factors dicussed above can surely make someone successful.Although we may not manage perfect guidance, money and luck by ourselves however, efforts can be made by personal physical and mental abilities according to our own choice that can be a determination.
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Sentence: In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations I would like to encorage by a prodigious quote of Hitler ''a paper is flying in the sky due to its luck but a bird is flying in the sky because of its efforts so when your luck does not support u then make endeavours to shine in career''
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