Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

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Some people think that hard working and determination are the key factors for being successful in the life, other people feel that other factors are important. Discuss both sides, what is your opinion?

In this rampant age of globalization, the journey of human beings from forests to flying by aeroplane is an enormous evident behind massive success of mankind so far. An earth-shaking question remains whether the hard work and determination are the key factors behind breakthrough of an individual or some other factors. Here, I would like to establish my arguements for both sides with my own perception.

To set in, there are numerous factors endorsing hard work and determination. First and foremost, hard work comprises our optimum endeavours to attain our desired objective. By practicing the...

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Sentence: An earth-shaking question remains whether the hard work and determination are the key factors behind breakthrough of an individual or some other factors.Here, I would like to establish my arguements for both sides with my own perception.
Error: arguements Suggestion: arguments

Sentence: By practicing these efforts, one can be very skilful to obtain towering success.
Error: skilful Suggestion: skillful

Sentence: To illistrate, the dream of Hitler to make German world power was ruined by unexpected cold which was likely to come three months later.
Error: illistrate Suggestion: illustrate

Sentence: From my notion, a combination of all factors dicussed above can surely make someone successful.Although we may not manage perfect guidance, money and luck by ourselves however, efforts can be made by personal physical and mental abilities according to our own choice that can be a determination.
Error: dicussed Suggestion: discussed

Sentence: In a nutshell, after doing a great deal of thought and deliberations I would like to encorage by a prodigious quote of Hitler ''a paper is flying in the sky due to its luck but a bird is flying in the sky because of its efforts so when your luck does not support u then make endeavours to shine in career''
Error: encorage Suggestion: encourage

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If I would not have commited spelling mistakes how much bands I could have achieved ??

N is the example related to Hitler's dream to make German world power suitable and good or not...????

When the score reaches to 8.0 or over, spelling errors play little role on the total performance. Even though you can remove the spelling errors, still you get 8.0.

You get mark less than 8.0 if you have more spelling errors however.

It is better not to use examples or words from Hilter. They are sensitive and some people may not like it.

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