In general, people think that today’s young generations are not willing to give their enough time to helping their communities. They support that they have to fulfill a lot of requirement from their society, such as from companies and schools. However, the notion does not reflect the stance that I hold and does not thought about in a different light. I believe that young people tend to use their enough time to volunteer for their communities because with these, they are able to get good job opportunities and relieve their cumulative stress.
First of all, young generations’ helping their communities are required to enter companies what they want to enter. To be specific, a great deal of leading companies, such as Apple and Samsung, requires people to participate in volunteer job as a basis for entering their companies. This is because volunteer job is beneficial for people to develop their skills in work, which as a result makes people who joined in improve communication, humility and leadership skills. For example, when I was trying to enter Apple, their basic requirements for entering the company is the fact how much people are participated in volunteer job for helping their communities. Without fulfilling the requirement, it is difficult for me to enter the company. At that time, I had lack of time to help our communities; therefore, I could not enter the company. Thus, I believe that today’s young generations have enough time to help their communities in order to get good job opportunities.
Moreover, participating in volunteer for communities allows young people to relieve stress and stay healthy. In addition, today’s competitive society let people far away from each other, which makes people to be less happy and satisfied with their lives because the human is social animal who could not live their life without communication with each other. However, these volunteer jobs make people to make strong connection with others in the same group. For instance, in Non Profit Organization, called NPO, a great deal of people has come altogether for helping their communities. They have done much works and shared their precious time, which as a result makes strong connections with each other and further, almost being family among them. Therefore, they are trying to talk their private problems and solve them as a family member. As a result, I learned that in modern society, young generations are willing to spend their enough time to help communities because it makes them relieve their cumulative stress during volunteer job.
To sum up, I believe that enough time to helping people’s communities is done by young generations: it is required for people to do in order to enter companies what they want to enter and it makes people to relieve stress as a member of communities. Consequently, the importance of my views cannot be underestimated in that it can kill two birds with one stone for the reasons I have mentioned above. All in all, this trend will probably continue for the next generations.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 173, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun requirement seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of requirements'.
Suggestion: a lot of requirements
... They support that they have to fulfill a lot of requirement from their society, such as from compan...
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Line 1, column 323, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'does' requires base form of the verb: 'think'
Suggestion: think
...ect the stance that I hold and does not thought about in a different light. I believe t...
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Line 2, column 589, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...or entering the company is the fact how much people are participated in volunteer jo...
^^^^
Line 3, column 605, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...lping their communities. They have done much works and shared their precious time, w...
^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in general', 'such as', 'as a result', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230502599653 0.229887763892 100% => OK
Verbs: 0.175043327556 0.158761421928 110% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0866551126516 0.0866891130778 100% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0346620450607 0.046263068375 75% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0797227036395 0.0685040099705 116% => OK
Prepositions: 0.123050259965 0.118717715034 104% => OK
Participles: 0.0381282495667 0.0351676179071 108% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.9019689426 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0485268630849 0.0309702414327 157% => OK
Particles: 0.00173310225303 0.00188951952338 92% => OK
Determiners: 0.0571923743501 0.0887237588012 64% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00866551126516 0.0209618222197 41% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0155979202773 0.0139019557991 112% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3059.0 2387.08602151 128% => OK
No of words: 503.0 408.028673835 123% => OK
Chars per words: 6.08151093439 5.86048508987 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73578520332 4.48200974243 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.351888667992 0.338922669872 104% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.246520874751 0.251872472559 98% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.174950298211 0.174417080927 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131212723658 0.112833075102 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9019689426 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44731610338 0.524397521467 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 51.1469957942 59.2087087015 86% => OK
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6684587814 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.9523809524 20.5533526081 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1278243403 48.84282405 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.666666667 120.699889404 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9523809524 20.5533526081 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.761904761905 0.644075263715 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.54480286738 72% => OK
Readability: 48.6044684275 45.7405998639 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.35329341317 1.45489161554 93% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328754312171 0.300154397459 110% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.138126945922 0.103427244359 134% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.086911874113 0.0752933317313 115% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.492468053952 0.497263757937 99% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.118288450625 0.151897553556 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.136669205926 0.114077575197 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702157818277 0.0781384742642 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.489216308278 0.336927656856 145% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0695429944448 0.067059652881 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.259091921354 0.210909579961 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0348887518947 0.0618886996521 56% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8870967742 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.86379928315 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.91756272401 41% => OK
Positive topic words: 15.0 8.42114695341 178% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.75985663082 36% => OK
Total topic words: 17.0 13.6433691756 125% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.