In the given set of material, the author states that the electronic medical record system is far weigh better than the paper based recording and suggests various advantages of it. However, the professor in the following material cast doubts on those points by providing evidences and justifications.
First, the passage says that the use of electronic recording will decrease the costs by saving money on storage and transferring records. It also allows easy access of records to doctors from anywhere. The professor refutes this point and argues that in spite of electronic recoding, doctors will continue using papers for writing prescriptions and they will store them for the medico-legal purpose. Hence, this system will not be cost effective as mentioned in the passage.
Second, the reading suggests that this system will reduce the chances of errors caused by illegible handwriting and improper transcription of data. The speaker rebuts this point as well and argues that the doctors will write prescription on paper and note down data on paper while examining the patient. Also, it is staff that makes mistakes while interpreting the doctor’s handwriting and recording data and thus the probability of having errors will still remain the same.
Third, the passage says that the electronic medical recording can help greatly in research work too. Conversely, the lecturer opposes this statement and asserts that there are very stringent privacy rules of government for the patients. The researchers will have to go through several stages of permission process to get the patient’s data which is indeed intricate and nearly impossible to get. It is totally up to the patient wish to either give permission or to block the access to its record.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, first, hence, however, if, second, so, still, third, thus, well, while, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 10.4613686534 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 7.30242825607 178% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 12.0772626932 75% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 30.3222958057 109% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1489.0 1373.03311258 108% => OK
No of words: 282.0 270.72406181 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28014184397 5.08290768461 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09790868904 4.04702891845 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74960843795 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 145.348785872 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59219858156 0.540411800872 110% => OK
syllable_count: 451.8 419.366225166 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 13.0662251656 99% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 21.2450331126 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.5296308606 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.538461538 110.228320801 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6923076923 21.698381199 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15384615385 7.06452816374 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 4.19205298013 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 4.45695364238 157% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.27373068433 47% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43956668912 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.148276462874 0.0996497079465 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100449263789 0.0662205650399 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254069432525 0.162205337803 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281204199294 0.0443174109184 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.3589403974 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 53.8541721854 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.2367328918 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.42419426049 109% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 63.6247240618 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.498013245 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
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Rates: 90 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27 Out of 30
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