Essay topics: TPO-17 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better then they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are certain considerations or factors which everyone can take into account to investigate and examine the advertisement represents to consumer a false and distorted image of the products promoted. I certainly believe that ads do not give us a true and honest picture of the products advertised. Someone can consciously weigh the pros and cons of each side. The explanations go as follows.
Firstly, advertisers tend to exaggerate positive facets of products and conceal negative ones. In fact, the main goal of any commercial or ad is to sell the product by any means. Of course, there is a law which does not allow using an apparently false advertisement but the advertisers managed to overcome it by underscoring advantages and avoiding mentioning of disadvantages. As a result public get a distorted image of the products. In order to prove the stance, try to recall any ad which openly and explicitly states about the negative facets of the product. I do not thing that any ad will pop up in your mind.
Secondly, in order to make us want to buy a certain product, advertisers promise us in commercials that we will feel in a certain way after the product is purchased and consumed. Those ads are directly addressed to our needs, dreams, wishes and unspoken desires. In other words, the creators of advertisements prescribe to the product unrealistic characteristics and features. For instance, we may take as an illustration any commercial of a luxury carmaker. If it is aimed a middle age man, we will see an actor with whom the viewer will be able to associate himself who gets attention of beautiful women who admire the driver. However, a person who bought the promoted car may never feel the promised emotions.
Admittedly there are some justifications by one who argues that advertisement gives a true representation of the product. Chiefly, this may be the idea that if the commercial is a lie, no one will buy it. However, still I affirm that ads do not give us an evenhanded image because today we have a plethora of products with similar characteristics and in order to promote them advertisers have to make up some unrealistic features which will highlight the product among others. This is merely inevitable.
Due to aforementioned ground, advertisement indeed gives us distorted representation via avoiding speaking about negative facets and emphasizing positive ones and promising us to satisfy our unspoken needs and desires.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: For instance, we may take as an illustration any commercial of a luxury carmaker.
Error: carmaker Suggestion: No alternate word
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 26 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 1 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.909 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.065 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 113 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 82 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.429 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.102 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.272 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.084 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Firstly, thank you for
Firstly, thank you for checking the essay.
Now I have a question about the template used.
may you clarify what parts of the essay ought to be altered?
Those pattern sentences
Those pattern sentences should be replaced by your own language. It takes a big risk to use them in the actual exams.
Thank you. I get it.
Thank you. I get it.
is this intor any better? does it violate something?
There are conspicuous reasons which a person might take into account to analyze and scrutinize the advertisement represents to consumer a false and distorted image of the products promoted. I absolutely believe that ads do not give us a true and honest picture of the products advertised. . Someone can evidently weigh the favorable and the unfavorable reasons of each side. The explanations go as will be stated next.
Thank you again. I am waiting for your response.
It is OK as long as you don't
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 379, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in fact, of course, speaking about, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2058.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04411764706 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12642124544 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522058823529 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 675.9 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.994623655914 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.6503941936 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.47619047619 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117151504098 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0334346955594 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341698293485 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.069304341577 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127929785579 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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