In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

In some countries, people consider that it will be better to teach children an additional language after embarking on school year instead of in middle of education. This essay will argue that the advantages of this outweigh the drawbacks. There are a huge number of benefits to learn foreign language from an early age, namely being more successful or gaining additional opportunities whereas meeting new language can be more difficult which need to be overtaken
The essential reason to learn a foreign language is that it can make children be more successful in future than others. That is to say that they will learn additional knowledge which created to access any data and another culture. For example, in some countries, English language lesson is taught from primary school and pupils who benefit it, they are more knowledgeable and sensible which make them achieve their goal more easily. Another favorable aspect, a chance to learn foreign language at first school year can create wide range opportunity to get next education level in abroad, therefore increases assumption to create great carrier. In other words, it will impact their interaction and their personal abilities in the positive side. For instance, in our country, most of these pupils have chosen their study and career in developed countries which has made them be blithe.
Those opposed to this say that it causes the child to meet additional subject and burden to deal with. It is obvious that most of a country's education system is not appropriate for children capasities, there are numerous subjects are provided them from an early age and additional language can be stressful. For example, my niece has been learning German language from earlier in their school and it has made him be confused and he has not enough time to learn all their subjects altogether.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, so, therefore, whereas, for example, for instance, in other words, that is to say

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 304.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07565789474 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59317161809 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.1343154694 49.4020404114 148% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.272727273 106.682146367 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6363636364 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.36363636364 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107522480399 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0499350112791 0.084324248473 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456789672023 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0791011350501 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141650155172 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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