You have applied for a course in a college, but there were no places available. Write a letter to the principal and ask to enrol for the next available course. Include the following:- Why do you want to do this course?- What other options would you like t

Dear Joy,
My name is Peter John, I am interested in pursuing bachelor degree in accounting in your institution. Though I applied for admission last semester with your institution but I was decline because accounting is not open for intake last semester.
I am still interested in pursuing a degree in accounting because I have always wanted to become an accountant since I was a child,studying accounting will make it possible for me to pursue my dream as accountant. But since accounting is not open for admission this semester, am looking at admission in banking and finance, because I understand that your institution will be admitting accounting student next year.
Considering that banking and finance is in conjunction with Accounting I do hope to transfer to accounting next year when the intake is open for admission.
I will be glad if my request is given consideration. I am open to any further suggestion you may have in respect to my choice of courses and for more information about me attach with this letter is my credentials and my address, please do well to contact me at any time for more information.
Kind regards
John Peter.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , studying
...become an accountant since I was a child,studying accounting will make it possible for me...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 276, Rule ID: AM_I[1]
Message: Did you mean 'am I'?
Suggestion: am I
...s not open for admission this semester, am looking at admission in banking and fin...
^^
Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...unting next year when the intake is open for admission. I will be glad if my re...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, look, may, still, well, of course

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.48453608247 147% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 5.05154639175 119% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.03092783505 99% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 26.3917525773 95% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.85567010309 259% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 958.0 937.175257732 102% => OK
No of words: 195.0 206.0 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91282051282 4.54256449028 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.73687570622 3.78020617076 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06735263745 2.54303337028 121% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 127.690721649 84% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548717948718 0.622605031667 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 301.5 290.88556701 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.463917525773 216% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 12.6804123711 63% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 16.3608247423 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.9814016134 44.8134815571 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.75 76.5299724578 156% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.375 16.8248392259 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 4.34317383033 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148877255779 0.216113520407 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0593184242422 0.0766984524023 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583783282683 0.0603063233224 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0966777804304 0.12726935374 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0377580794567 0.0580467560999 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 8.37731958763 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 70.7449484536 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 7.45979381443 154% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 8.71597938144 132% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 7.59969072165 107% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 41.2886597938 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 8.62886597938 156% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 8.54432989691 136% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 8.15463917526 147% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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