In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Today, products from multinational companies such as Coca-Cola, Nike, Ford, Puma, and Toshiba are easy to find in most countries all around the word. People from these countries take pride in consume them. Some people argue, since people more and more depend on these products, it is seriously damaging standard of life.
Through mass media, worldwide companies led people to follow kind of hedonistic life-style in every intention of selling their products. They put massive advertisement to encourage brand loyalty anywhere we live. This is drive people to buy goods because of trend and live-style, not because they really need the products. They have big intention to own some particular product because of the influence of media and society. It is the fact that drove the multinational companies takes huge benefit from this. For example, my cousin always shops for a new bag every time we go to the mall. Her only reason is because of all her friends behave that way as well. In that case, it seems that multinational companies success control their customer behavior with brand image.
However, people have to be sensible to deal with commercial promotion. The way people become more and more addict to particular products, is not only companies responsibility. People still have options in choose their way of living instead of following all what advertisement offer to them. Careful consideration should be settle when decide to buy products. To stay in quality of live, control consuming passion is important. The way we living, is not decided by the advertisement or by the companies.
All in all, I believe that addicting to certain product can damage people quality of live. But, for one who is able to control their consuming passion, it does not a big problem.
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