Topic 4: Some people feel that it is always wrong to keep animals in captivities for instance in zoo. Other people say that there are benefits for these animals and human. Discuss both sides of this debate and give your personal view.
Many years ago, meeting demand on entertainment and education of people, a large number of zoos are built rapidly. Many people believe that animals should live in nature while others think Wildlife Park brings a tremendous amount of benefits for both them and human (The society ). Those arguments are challenging issue and have both advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly, there is no denying that zoos play an important role in wildlife conservation. As statistics suggest, the number of wild endangered animals of extinction is increasing rapidly due to many reasons such as changing environment or encroaching forest of humans. Therefore, zoos are useful places that help the country maintain biodiversity. In addition, no sooner had zoos built than a large number of people had jobs such as zookeeper. Moreover, especially, Zoo can foster awareness of wildlife and nature for children, which assists the mission of protecting environment.
However, many people argue that animals should live in natural environment instead of any captivity because those places will make them lose their instinct such as hunting food. It would be better to save endangered species by protecting their natural habitats. Beside, we have no right to use animals for entertainment. Indeed, newspapers have shown that many enterprises build zoos aiming to make a profit instead of protecting and developing in careful standards.
In conclusion, I am in favor of the idea that we should keep animals in zoos because it brings many effective aspects of researching, protecting and developing endangered species. Since the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, they should be maintained in the future.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...fits for both them and human The society . Those arguments are challenging issue a...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...addition, no sooner had zoos built than a large number of people had jobs such as zookeeper. More...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1424.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45593869732 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98156838167 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593869731801 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4915777045 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.714285714 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6428571429 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.85714285714 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189213330729 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0615437034941 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0593819107828 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118176574868 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0424580854773 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.