In the modern world, being a professional sportsperson is gradually becoming an alternative livelihood for some individuals to survive. It is commonly believed that a sportsman can be regarded as a role model for the youth to emulate. However, other people oppose the view.
It is reasonable to believe that young people can be positively affected by a sportsperson. First of all, most athletes have a variety of valuable qualities that are worthy of serious attention. Lee Chongwei, a badminton world champion, for example, is well-known for his steadfast dedication and tremendous perseverance which are vastly valued by the whole world. Therefore, such qualities can inspire young people to become hardy individuals. In addition, athletes also play a significant role in encouraging the youth to take exercise regularly and maintain their health by providing guidance, as they have an impressive proficiency and knowledge about the importance and benefits of daily exercise.
On the other hand, it is also worth mentioning that some sportspersons are not always the optimum role model for the young. Firstly, athletes play no role in educating young people, especially school students, about the approaches to enhance their academic performance, as most sportsmen are ineffectual at theoretical studies. Furthermore, a large number of sportsmen have difficulty in disciplining themselves and cannot refrain from a series of temptations, thereby deviating from social norms and becoming notorious for misbehaviour, including doping or sexual scandals. As a consequence, most psychologically immature adolescents may develop a tendency to imitate them blindly.
To conclude with my opinion, most athletes are well-qualified for being viewed as a good role model for the youth, attributable to their valuable qualities. However, the minority of sportsmen without much self-discipline might also negatively influence the young, thereby misleading them.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 292 350
No. of Characters: 1621 1500
No. of Different Words: 173 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.134 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.551 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.157 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 86 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.857 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.501 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.324 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.055 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...al at theoretical studies. Furthermore, a large number of sportsmen have difficulty in disciplini...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, for example, in addition, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1671.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 292.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.72260273973 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24991699881 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.616438356164 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 527.4 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.4532624329 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.357142857 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8571428571 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.71428571429 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198049105359 0.244688304435 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707334687817 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0489578488217 0.0667982634062 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126195571222 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0127266173701 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.26 50.2224549098 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.5 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.9 12.4159519038 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.41 8.58950901804 121% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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