Ielts writing task 1
The line chart compares and shows some preditions for the rate of people aged 65 or more in three different countries namely Japan, Sweden and the USA between 1940 and 2040.
It is clear from the graph that all the percentages of people aged 65 and above in Japan, Sweden and the USA increase during the research period. Additionally, the figure for the USA experience the most dramatic change.
In 1940, 5% of Japanese were 65 or older, compared to approximate 7% of Sweden's population. Meanwhile, the USA had the highest rate of elderly people with 9%. The next 60 years, while there were rises in the percentage of individuals aged 65 or more in Sweden and the USA, the figure for Japan decreased to around 3% before climbed back to its initial level.
It is predicted that, in 2040, Japan will have the highest rate of people aged 65 and over among three nations, at 27%. Meanwhile, the figures for Sweden and the USA are likely to be slightly lower , at 25% and 24% respectively.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 198, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... the USA are likely to be slightly lower , at 25% and 24% respectively.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 6.8 176% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 817.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 176.0 196.424390244 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64204545455 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.64232057368 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49048109607 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 102.0 106.607317073 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579545454545 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.4926829268 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.3867942073 43.030603864 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.125 112.824112599 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 22.9334400587 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.625 5.23603664747 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 61.2550243902 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.14 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.9970731707 98% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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