Firstly, nowadays the speed of occurring of every thing is high. Sometimes an idea for fulfilling must do immediately. Take a person to establish a special fast food restaurant as an example. If he want to consider the various aspects of subject and waits for illustrating other vague aspects, he may not be successful in his idea. Because during considering other people may operate more fast that him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast food idea. In addition this subject can be happen in internet trading base business. In this media, an idea must be established as soon as possible like Amazon. Thus, because of being every thing high speed todays, people should do their work more faster and take a risk sometimes.
Secondly, by wasting the time some ambiguous aspects of every thing may not be clear. According to the psychologists, some people cover their fear behind their consideration. When they want to make a decision they consider more than usual to clearance every thing. The first step is the hard one. In my opinion, after some thinking about a project a decision must be made immediately. By consuming much time clearance may not occur. In result, taking a risk can be mention as a first step for doing every thing.
Finally, being successful needs to take a risk in many situations. In the new world, some projects or subjects requires to fall in risky status. By considering the successful people lifestyle it can be referred that some of them have been exposed to the risky situation. Besides, some of position can be achievable by taking a risk. Therefore, succeed can behind take risking.
In sum, based on aforementioned reasons I believe that people should take a risk in many decision and try to do every thing immediately instead of do slow and correctly because of speed of happening things, no wasting time and exploring successes behind the risk.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 18, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
Firstly, nowadays the speed of occurring of every thing is...
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Line 1, column 200, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
...st food restaurant as an example. If he want to consider the various aspects of subj...
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Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate more fast that him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast f...
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Line 1, column 437, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...hat him and copy his idea therefore he do not able to start fast food idea. In ad...
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Line 1, column 477, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...do not able to start fast food idea. In addition this subject can be happen in internet ...
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Line 1, column 611, Rule ID: AS_ADJ_AS[1]
Message: Comparison is written "as possible 'as'".
Suggestion: as
...must be established as soon as possible like Amazon. Thus, because of being every th...
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Line 1, column 706, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...eed todays, people should do their work more faster and take a risk sometimes. Secondly, ...
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Line 2, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “When” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... their fear behind their consideration. When they want to make a decision they consi...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'falling'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: falling
...rld, some projects or subjects requires to fall in risky status. By considering the suc...
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Line 4, column 85, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun decision seems to be countable; consider using: 'many decisions'.
Suggestion: many decisions
...lieve that people should take a risk in many decision and try to do every thing immediately i...
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Line 4, column 265, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd exploring successes behind the risk.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83742331288 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69035193354 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518404907975 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 9.59856630824 10% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.2980166539 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.0952380952 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.5238095238 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.14285714286 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.5376344086 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 11.7677419355 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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