TPO47
Today, daily, many different events are happening in the worldwide and because of technology development, they diverse among the people quickly. These events might be important for some people and for others may not. In my opinion, all of them are crucial for anyone and it is better to follow them daily.
First, our information is increased by following the news and significant world's occurrence. If someone read about the important events of the world, such as political affairs, sports games, and even artistic events, undoubtedly, their knowledge will improve automatically. Almost all universe's events have a direct and indirect effect on other people life around the world whether they accept this influence or not. For example, DAESH, a terrorist group which has attacked to the Middle East, are very dangerous and hazardous, the only way to know them and understand about their activities is following the TV news, newspaper and so on.
In addition, some of these events may occur in the future for other people in another side of the world. For example, several climatic events are taking part for people in countries and the people in the other countries should read and study about these problems because those might happen to them in the non-far future. They can improve their abilities in front of these problems just by following the problems on other countries. For instance, many years ago in happened an earthquake in the Haiti, and the all people in my country had read in the newspapers, watching TV news and other instruments to know about this event. Therefore, just 2 years later, an earthquake occurred in Bam, a city in Iran, but people because of this information that had accumulated in Haiti's earthquake could prevent a strange and dangerous problem.
In summary, although some people disagree with my view and say that those events are not important, they influence the other peoples' life. Then, who can ignore these fundamental effects?
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- TPO46 3
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 15, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
Today, daily, many different events are happening in the worldwide a...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nd it is better to follow them daily. First, our information is increased by f...
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Line 3, column 75, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'worlds'' or 'world's'?
Suggestion: worlds'; world's
...d by following the news and significant worlds occurrence. If someone read about the i...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ing the TV news, newspaper and so on. In addition, some of these events may oc...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...vent a strange and dangerous problem. In summary, although some people disagre...
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...not important, they influence the other peoples life. Then, who can ignore these fundam...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, then, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, in summary, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1652.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 325.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08307692308 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60432048855 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541538461538 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.484083053 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2142857143 20.6045352989 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.28571428571 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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