For many people, the number of friends at Facebook is a kind of social currency to display how likeable he or she is. In addition, there is no shortage of debate whether it is better to have the ability uphold friendships with a small number of friends or make friends with large number of people very easily. In my opinion, however, it is better to have the ability to maintain social connections over a long period. I feel this way for two main reason, which I will explore in the following essay.
First, friendships over a long time is more rewarding than anything else. Long-term friends give you the feeling of comfort and safety to talk about very private topics openly. Moreover, the moment when your friend and yourself reached the point, where you do not even have to talk with him/her to understand each other is so valuable. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Since the kindergarten, I had a very good friend with whom I could talk about every topic and aspect of my life. Before everyone else, including my family, he knew the name of my first crush, the reasons of my break up with my first girlfriend and many more private topics. However, last year, our friendship broke because of his new girlfriend and my stupidity. Thus, I look sometimes back and miss this feeling of 15 years of pure understanding. For this reason, I am striving for long-lasting friendships with my current accompanies to experience this feeling again.
Second, having the ability to maintain a friendship for a long time shows people in your surrounding that you are very loyal, which is found very rarely in todays world. Therefore, you did not even need the ability to approach other people easily, because they will come to you and want to know you better due to your ability. For instance, during my first college year, my current girlfriend approached me because she adored my ability for maintaining long-lasting friendships. Furthermore, I got a lot of appreciation in the society, whenever I told them that I have still good friends from the kindergarten time. Accordingly, the ability to uphold long-friendships is much appreciated than the ability to make easily friends.
Due to above-mentioned reasons, I firmly believe that it is more beneficial to have the ability to maintain friends, especially because of the comforting and safe feeling of a long friendship and the appreciation from the society to have such an amazing ability.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 228, Rule ID: SMALL_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, use 'a few', or use 'some'
Suggestion: a few; some
...ave the ability uphold friendships with a small number of friends or make friends with large numb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, i feel, in addition, kind of, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87350835322 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82965731912 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508353221957 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 635.4 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8813168012 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.473684211 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0526315789 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.15789473684 5.45110844103 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.338124455187 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107281074386 0.076458572812 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742607400331 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211918420139 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802159340885 0.0645574589148 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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