tpo integrated 40

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tpo integrated 40

Submitted by mariem on Wed, 06/21/2017 - 14:32

The lecture and the reading both discuss the possibility of living on Venus. Which the reading states that it is impossible to live on the Venus surface and provides three reasons of supports, the lecture refutes each of the reading reasons and saying that it possible to live on the Venus surface by set up a balloon station which will be fifty kilometer away from the surface of Venus

First of all, the reading claims that the atmospheric pressure of Venus is 90 times greater than the atmospheric pressure of earth, that cause nay human land on the Venus surface to crushed. However, the lecture argues that by having a balloon station 50 kilometer above the Venus surface that will lead to have the same atmospheric pressure as earth.

In addition, the reading makes the argument that there is no reservoir of water on the surface of Venus. Venus surface only occupy with sulfuric acid and carbon dioxide. The lecture counters this point by stating that carbon dioxide and sulfuric acid are helpful to get water and oxygen. According to the professor the production of water and oxygen by chemical process from sulfuric acid and carbon dioxide is easy on the balloon station and there is no need to import water and oxygen from the Earth.

Lastly, the reading passage argues that there is not enough sun light on the Venus earth. Because the thick cloud reflects back the sun light. The reading claims that there is no Way to get electricity on Venus surface. The lecture refutes this claim by pointing out at the balloon station level the clouds there are thinner, and reflect sun light will be easier. Moreover, the professor says that at the balloon station we can benefit from the light to get enough electricity to generate the station itself.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
The lecture and the reading both discuss...
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Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...p a balloon station which will be fifty kilometer away from the surface of Venus ...
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Line 1, column 390, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...kilometer away from the surface of Venus First of all, the reading claims tha...
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Line 4, column 79, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hat the atmospheric pressure of Venus is 90 times greater than the atmospheric pr...
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Line 4, column 261, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'kilometer' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'kilometers'.
Suggestion: kilometers
...ues that by having a balloon station 50 kilometer above the Venus surface that will lead ...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... same atmospheric pressure as earth. In addition, the reading makes the argum...
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Line 6, column 116, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'surfaces'.
Suggestion: surfaces
...of water on the surface of Venus. Venus surface only occupy with sulfuric acid and carb...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... water and oxygen from the Earth. Lastly, the reading passage argues that ...
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Line 9, column 96, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ot enough sun light on the Venus earth. Because the thick cloud reflects back the sun l...
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Line 9, column 323, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'thinners'?
Suggestion: thinners
...loon station level the clouds there are thinner, and reflect sun light will be easier. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, lastly, moreover, so, in addition, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 12.0772626932 108% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 22.412803532 76% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 304.0 270.72406181 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81907894737 5.08290768461 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.04702891845 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29090765362 2.5805825403 89% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 145.348785872 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.427631578947 0.540411800872 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 456.3 419.366225166 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 3.25607064018 31% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.116997792494 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 21.2450331126 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 118.7685658 49.2860985944 241% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 122.083333333 110.228320801 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 21.698381199 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.58333333333 7.06452816374 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 4.19205298013 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.354769653112 0.272083759551 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141912512167 0.0996497079465 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.044659816116 0.0662205650399 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.220568108088 0.162205337803 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0379029261559 0.0443174109184 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.3589403974 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 53.8541721854 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 63.6247240618 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 10.7273730684 261% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.498013245 114% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 65.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 19.5 Out of 30
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