because of the pressure of new subjects such as business studies, many schools have dropped sport or physical education (PE) from the curriculum. How important is sport or PE in a young person's education?
Iin this era, many kinds of school have been cut the intensity of physical education. Whereas, sport or physical education is one of the most important education should b given or students. In fact, physical education has given a lot of benefits for students. The benefits are to being healthy, being able to drop stress, and being good at team work.
First of all, to be healthy is not expensive. The appropriate way is doing exercise and it an be introduced by physical education at schools. It is crucial, because a number of students have got obesity disorder is increasing recently. Schools can reduce this phenomena because students have spending much time at school.
Second, physical education can help students to minimize stress. As we known, students have got much pressure whether in school or family. Many tasks should be handed in time and also demanding to get achievement. Furthermore, the simplest way to drop stress is exercising.
Third, physical education is placed for students to learn how to manage themselves in teamwork. Therefore, schools should not only give lesson in the class but also in physical way. The impact of this way will be needed when students have ready to compete at work.
From the above, it can be denied that physical education gives positive impact in mentally as well as physically for students prolonged. That is why, the number of physical education must be increased, especially for young people. If not, health problem will arise. The quality o students is in charge of schools.
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