success does not fall into your lap without working hard to pursue it. In order to be successful in your job, you must do your best in the school to get the appropriate skills that qualify you to standout. Many people argue that success in the career field depend on your relation skills with the surrounding. However, as far as I am concerned, I firmly believe that working hard in the school is the key for many reasons which I will mention them below.
First of all, working hard in school always pays off. What I mean that, the information and the knowledge that you receive from the teacher are valuable. The teacher imparts great knowledge to the students which is extremely important for them in their future career. In addition to that, students must work hard to fully understand and comprehend all these information to shine in hios career. For example, I remember when I was in college, I was working so hard to understand everything in the class. Not only seeking to understand the lecture, but also I was concerned to update my self with the latest information and technology. That serve me well throughout my life career since I start working, everytask in the job was a peace of cake for me. By working hard in the school, I was able to manage my work successfully. As you can see, working hard in the school is the key to success in the future career.
Secondly, working hard in the school enables you to make a good social network. Many students in the school seek to make a hard working friends so that they can help each other academically. BY this way, hard work students will gain the skills of being sociable that in the long run, it will help them to deal smoothly with their customers in their job. For example, when I was in high school' I was so diligent student. Many students want me to be their friend. as a result, I made a lot of friends. That help me to be outgoing person which in turn, it helped me to communicate easily with the customer in my job. By being hard working student, I was able to hit two birds with one stone.
In a conclusion, hard work in the school is the key to success in your future job. Not only because the knowledge that I gained from my diligency, but also because the huge social network that I made in the school which facilitate the success in future career. We should all work hard in the school to be successful in our future professional life.
- Successful people try new things and take risk rather than doing what they know how to do well 60
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- TPO-02 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Always telling the truth is the most important consideration in any relationship between people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
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- TPO-23 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In today’s world, it is more important to work quickly and risk making mistakes than to work slowly and make sure that everything is correct.Use specific reasons an 79
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, well, for example, i mean, in addition, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1982.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 443.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.47404063205 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47812559236 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428893905192 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 592.2 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.994623655914 201% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0954056822 48.9658058833 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5833333333 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4583333333 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 11.8709677419 143% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211215790279 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759757392204 0.076458572812 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560149273833 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159868091096 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0536290854368 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 58.1214874552 135% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.1575268817 67% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.7 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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