The topic is about the bird decline in the United States. The lecturer refutes the three reason of the continuing decline presented in the reading passage. The lecturer thinks the support of these claims are unconvincing.
First, the lecturer argues that the population of some types of bird decline; however, the number of many other types of bird is increasing because of the better and larger habitats provided by the urban development. Cities complained about the increased number of some birds. So it is inaccurate to describe the bird population as uniformly declines. According to the reading passage, the size of the bird population will shrink as the result of the vanishing habitats used for human activities.
Second, the lecturer assumes that less and less land is used in agriculture in the United States every year. A new kind of crops that is more productive has been developed. These crops can provide more food, making it unnecessary to destroy more wilderness. The reading passage gives the opposite view. the bird population will continue to decline due to more and more wilderness land that are converted to agriculture use.
Third, the lecturer think it is incorrect to project the current situation of pesticides to the future because two main changes were made. First, a new and less toxoid pesticide has been developed. Also, new pest-resistance crop will decrease the use of harmful pesticides. This is in the direct contradiction with the claim in the reading passage that chemical pesticides will contribute to the decline of the bird population in the future.
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Essay evaluation report
The lecturer refutes the three reason of the continuing decline presented in the reading passage.
The lecturer refutes the three reasons about the continuing decline of the bird population presented in the reading passage. //more clear with 'bird population'
The lecturer thinks the support of these claims are unconvincing.
The lecturer thinks the supports of these claims are unconvincing.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 25 in 30
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 12
No. of Words: 260 250
No. of Characters: 1300 1200
No. of Different Words: 126 150
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.016 4.2
Average Word Length: 5 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.696 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 74 60
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.333 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.055 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.341 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.083 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...cline presented in the reading passage. The lecturer thinks the support of these cl...
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Line 5, column 304, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...eading passage gives the opposite view. the bird population will continue to declin...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, third, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 22.412803532 49% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 30.3222958057 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 5.01324503311 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1339.0 1373.03311258 98% => OK
No of words: 260.0 270.72406181 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15 5.08290768461 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.04702891845 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77252741808 2.5805825403 107% => OK
Unique words: 131.0 145.348785872 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503846153846 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 432.0 419.366225166 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.23620309051 146% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.313427791 49.2860985944 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.6875 110.228320801 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.25 21.698381199 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5625 7.06452816374 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 4.33554083885 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 4.45695364238 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.27373068433 211% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.43954588219 0.272083759551 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129641031698 0.0996497079465 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114931011676 0.0662205650399 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240567834484 0.162205337803 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0777923032189 0.0443174109184 176% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.3589403974 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 53.8541721854 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.0289183223 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.29 12.2367328918 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.42419426049 99% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 63.6247240618 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.7273730684 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.