Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain people,
while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate.
Discuss both views and give you own opinion.
Museums are a relatively recent enterprise and the first museums were established in XIX century Europe. Thus the reason for existing museums and their main goals aren’t clear. Some of those who visit them tend to believe that entertainment is a major goal, at the same time, many claim that education may be seen as a chief purpose of museums.
Primarily, those who claim that museums serve to please and to amuse public state that a desire to be entertained is one of the most strong motives of a human being. If museums were not interesting and enjoyable, they would be closed many years ago. Consequently, it is possible to conclude that museums serve to entertain.
Secondly, there are those who visit museums and exhibitions to acquire new knowledge. In fact, visiting such places allows public to witness and to learn new information in a unique way. To illustrate, it is one thing to read about dinosaurs and another to see skeletons of those extinct monsters. Thus museums provide people with knowledge as well.
Finally, although two prospects that have been discussed above may appear to be in conflict, they, in fact, complement each other. Many modern museums across the world have become interactive. For example, Beijing National Museum has developed a game that allowed visitors reconstruct appearance of the creatures whose skeletons are on display. As a result, public get entertained and educated at the same time.
To sum up, many contemporary museums in which new technology is used have become places where visitors many enjoy themselves and acquire knowledge simultaneously.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
better to replace 'Secondly,' to 'However' or 'On the other hand', since it has different ideas to the the second paragraph.
No. of Words: 263 350 //the essay can reach higher marks with more content
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 263 350
No. of Characters: 1301 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.027 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.947 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.699 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 93 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 71 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.117 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.58 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.054 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 106, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...were established in XIX century Europe. Thus the reason for existing museums and the...
^^^^
Line 1, column 282, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun claim seems to be countable; consider using: 'many claims'.
Suggestion: many claims
...ment is a major goal, at the same time, many claim that education may be seen as a chief p...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a unique way" with adverb for "unique"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...to witness and to learn new information in a unique way. To illustrate, it is one thing to read...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ee skeletons of those extinct monsters. Thus museums provide people with knowledge a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in fact, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1355.0 1615.20841683 84% => OK
No of words: 262.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17175572519 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80281861762 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.603053435115 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8171783278 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3333333333 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.8 7.06120827912 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249204826392 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0824924773027 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.039238974678 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134137641367 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368489986586 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 50.2224549098 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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