Some people think it is more important for government to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is argued that government should pour more money into improving a healthy living to prevent diseases than find out the cure of victims. In my opinion. I totally disagree with this view for following reasons.
There are strong reasons for government to promote a healthy lifestyle. First, people can work more effectively, live longer once they have a good health. A healthy lifestyle also play a part as to prevent illness. According to many researches, people who do not smoke live longer than smokers do. Secondly, it encourages individuals to do more exercises such as walking, riding bicycle which are the good ways to reduce an amount of carbon dioxide released in the air. Then, our air will be fresher, much cleaner which is much better for us to live.
From my point of view, it is more essential to spend money on treatment of victims. Once, scientists found out the cure of rare disorders, it would be a remarkable step for our science, make a reduction of the victims suffering from those disorders and stop infectious from spreading. Black Death killing about 200 million Europeans in 14th century offers a excellent example. Causing by black rast, pest was the tragedy of people in Europe in 14th. Another reason is nowadays not all illnesses are attributable to lifestyle choices, it can be a result of polluted environment. According to many sources of information, there are thousand of Africans die because of lack of fresh water each year.
In conclusion, while promoting healthy living is important, treatment must have priority in health service spending.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, while, as to, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 10.4138276553 10% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 24.0651302605 62% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 264.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99242424242 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03089032464 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7050440929 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.655303030303 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 405.9 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.546324203 49.4020404114 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.375 106.682146367 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5 20.7667163134 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3125 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261247000441 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0733182362114 0.084324248473 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0574491945485 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134063607587 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433141733683 0.056905535591 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 50.2224549098 127% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.3001002004 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 9.78957915832 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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