17.09.2017 In many countries schools have severe problems with student behavior.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
Misconducting students have become an urgent problem in many states today. Below some reasons of the trend and likely solutions will be discussed in details.
To begin with, improper behavior of children could be a consequence of parents’ attitude to upbringing. Contemporary mothers and fathers often prefer spending their spare time on watching TV, surfing the internet and chatting with friends. This conduct makes offspring feel abandon and unwanted. They begin to attract the attention of adults through breaking rules and violating norms at school. Additionally, the food that is consumed by kinds at school cafés contains a large volume of sugar that excites and energizes the youngsters when they should sit still and pay attention to the lecturer. In other words, guardians’ unwillingness to devote themselves to progeny and snacks that have too much sugar seems to be main culprits of the situation.
However, those causes may be addressed aptly. Firstly, parents must be taught how to bring up their offspring properly. In fact, understanding that parents negligence is caused by ignorance could help tremendously. If they are given knowledge that has been collected by pundits for many decades, their attitude to kids will surely become more responsible and mature. Thus, children that are loved, patronized and advised will be satisfied with attention and will not misbehave. Secondly, food that is eaten by pupils ought to be cleaned from excessive sugar that is added to make it teste better. If there was no sugar, listeners would not act so impulsively and disruptively. Thus, working with parents’ understanding of upbringing and making food free of sugar will likely alleviate the issues in discussion.
In conclusion, there are some objective reasons such as parents’ ignorance that led to negligence and the diet full of sugar are the causes of the misconduct at schools but if those issues are addressed aptly, they may be resolved.
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at school.
at schools.
at a school.
guardians’ unwillingness to devote themselves to progeny and snacks that have too much sugar seems to be main culprits of the situation.
guardians’ unwillingness to devote themselves to progeny and snacks that have too much sugar seem to be main culprits of the situation.
there are some objective reasons such as parents’ ignorance that led to negligence and the diet full of sugar are the causes of the misconduct at schools but if those issues are addressed aptly, they may be resolved.
Description: 'they' refers to what? Be sensitive to use pronouns.
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flaws:
1. 'that' is over used or unnecessary. maximum one that in one sentence. If that can be replaced, don't need to use that.
look:
the food that is consumed by kinds at school cafés contains a large volume of sugar that excites and energizes the youngsters..
advised:
the food consumed by kinds at school cafés contains a large volume of sugar to excite and energize the youngsters..
In other words, guardians’ unwillingness to devote themselves to progeny and snacks that have too much sugar seems to be main culprits of the situation.
advised:
In other words, guardians’ unwillingness to devote themselves to progeny and snacks with too much sugar seems to be main culprits of the situation.
Secondly, food thatis eaten by pupils ought to be cleaned from excessive sugar that is added to make it teste better.
advised:
Secondly, food for pupils ought to be cleaned from excessive sugar added to make it taste better .
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2.No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 313 350
No. of Characters: 1603 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.206 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.121 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.691 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 116 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 91 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.412 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.541 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.27 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.455 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.024 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Thank you!
Thank you!
May you summarize my main style problems?
I have looked back for your comments
- I tend to overuse that, which etc
- I have a problem with articles.
May you add something to the list.
I keep working with my mistakes. Thankyou.
Well, there are no other
Well, there are no other issues found yet. Maybe in future essays.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, thus, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1674.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3482428115 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92076740222 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610223642173 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 506.74238477 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.2943984268 49.4020404114 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.4705882353 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4117647059 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 7.06120827912 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0964490356812 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0329307649708 0.084324248473 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0313295479728 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690967417686 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0330028464064 0.056905535591 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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