25/09/2017
You are due to start a new job next week but you will not be able to because you have some problems.
Write a letter to your new employer, in your letter
Explain your situation
Describe your problems
Tell him when you think you can start.
Dear Mr. Smith,
I am writing to apologize for the inconvenience caused by me.
Two weeks ago I had an online job interview with your representative who stated that my candidature is accepted on a position of a web-designer in your company and I need arrive in Los Angeles on 2nd March 2017 to begin my work.
Unfortunately, it appears that I am not able to meet this requirement. Firstly, there are some problems with a new apartment in LA. Although I have found a suitable house for my family that is located near my new workplace, I struggle to find a decent school in the same neighborhood that will suit to my young daughter who studies at elementary school. Secondly, it seems that I contracted a severe case of flue. In fact, I have been hospitalized for a week and my doctor strictly recommended me to stay in a bed for at least two weeks in order to avoid having complications with my health.
Consequently, I would like to start my work on 1st April 2017 because by this time the disease will have been completely cured and a full course of rehabilitation will have been finished as well. Moreover, my wife will be able to find a proper school for our beloved offspring as well.
Sincerely yours,
Eugene Dubinchuk
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
flaws:
sentences are too long:
Two weeks ago I had an online job interview with your representative who stated that my candidature is accepted on a position of a web-designer in your company and I need arrive in Los Angeles on 2nd March 2017 to begin my work.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 40 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 221 350
No. of Characters: 981 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.856 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.439 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.872 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 59 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 43 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 33 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.091 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.741 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.455 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.33 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.78 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.053 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Sincerely yours, Eugene Dubinchuk
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, at least, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.48453608247 94% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 4.92783505155 122% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 5.05154639175 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.03092783505 231% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 32.9175257732 100% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1024.0 937.175257732 109% => OK
No of words: 221.0 206.0 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6334841629 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.78020617076 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94073787193 2.54303337028 116% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 127.690721649 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628959276018 0.622605031667 101% => OK
syllable_count: 320.4 290.88556701 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.41237113402 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 1.44329896907 69% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 12.6804123711 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 16.3608247423 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.8198418524 44.8134815571 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.4 76.5299724578 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 16.8248392259 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9 4.34317383033 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 1.49484536082 334% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134736628438 0.216113520407 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0456996185191 0.0766984524023 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390233604592 0.0603063233224 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0735069692879 0.12726935374 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452115482966 0.0580467560999 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 8.37731958763 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 70.7449484536 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 8.71597938144 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 7.59969072165 104% => OK
difficult_words: 45.0 41.2886597938 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 8.62886597938 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 8.54432989691 126% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.