There is a growing concern these days that youngesters are becoming careless about helping their comunities. Some believe that each individual should pay attention to its circumstance and try to help the comunity. While, others countrodict this idea and assert that there is no need for young people to be concern about their living place. I tend to support the former view and the bases for my view are personal and social.
From asocial perspective, it is essential that each person effect its community positively so as to increase the quality of his or her life. To illustrate more, take university for instance, as a small community in which most of us spend our time to educate. we are in interaction whit this comunity and it will affect our life as well. Unless each student gives enough time to help mitigating the university's problem as a whole, his oun problems will not be solved. As an other instance, assume the situation that no one respect transportation rules in the society. However, each of us may think that he as a single member of the society will not affect the general arrangement, we see that an accident caused by a careless driver how can disturb the whole community. Cosequently, in social life each person especially young people should allocate enough time to help their communities.
Personally speaking, one of the most integral golas in each person's life is to be an effective person and by helping the community one will feel satisfied with herself. For example, as a young person, I tried to spread the culture of saving water among my family and friends only by reducing the time of brushing teeth from 5minutes to 2 minutes in order to save water supplies for future generations. Not only I felt satisfied personally by helping the community in this way, but also I made incentive in others to do so. Therefore, even from a personal view, people should give time to help the community.
all in all, I am convinced that, untill now in developed countries the high quality of life have been resulted from the cultur of contributing time to help the society and would not have been possible otherwise.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 92, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
... person effect its community positively so as to increase the quality of his or her life...
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Line 3, column 260, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: We
...h most of us spend our time to educate. we are in interaction whit this comunity a...
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Line 3, column 384, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to mitigate' or 'mitigate'.
Suggestion: to mitigate; mitigate
... each student gives enough time to help mitigating the universitys problem as a whole, his...
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Line 3, column 471, Rule ID: AN_OTHER[1]
Message: Did you mean 'another'? This word sequence is usually spelled together.
Suggestion: another
...his oun problems will not be solved. As an other instance, assume the situation that no ...
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Line 5, column 61, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
... one of the most integral golas in each persons life is to be an effective person and b...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: All
...uld give time to help the community. all in all, I am convinced that, untill now...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1776.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 369.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.81300813008 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68551242742 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544715447154 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 576.0 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.4597607093 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0625 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147343049552 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0528332798883 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0506465575149 0.0737576698707 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.083027546875 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298609199087 0.0645574589148 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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