It is clear that the term of time is an pivotal role in our life specially for young generation. If we appreciate our surroundings when people are moving inside city, we can realize that people are in hurry to get thier work, get to school or get home. Some people belive that young people do not give enough time to helping thier communities. Others disagree. Personally, I am in the favor with the former group for two important reasons which are detailed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, our life style has changed. In the past, young people had more time to help their communities not only they were not included in nowadays' conditions such as needing for a lot of equipments, working at distance places but they also were not busy. As an example, you can imagine people have to immigrate to another cities especially large cities in persuit of jobs. If they are fortunate you find one job which is very far away from both thier home and their home town too. They have to spend a considerable amount of time on commuting from home to work and inversly. It goes withoout saying that they do not have time to help their comunities or even and above all thier families too.
Moreover, with advent of new technology in any area people they does not help each other. People in the past did not have any technology to use them for doing their works. They therefor have to help each other to do their jobs. As a case in point, you can imagine rural areas, where people do agricultures. They did not have any agricultures machine which help them to do their work such as cultivation. In those conditions, people have to help each other because they were dependent on each others. In fact, lack of any technology makes them to help each other. As is clear, although technology has a good impact on our life but it isolate people from each other.
To sum up, I completely agree with the idea that young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Not only has our life style changed but the advent new technology has an important effect. People need to use technology but it is important to keep helping to each other simultaneously.
- TPO 48 - Integrated Writing Task 80
- TPO-03 - Independent Writing Task Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.Use specific reasons and examples to 70
- TPO 38 Integrated writing 3
- People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries 53
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
It is clear that the term of time is an pivotal role in our life specially for ...
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Line 2, column 141, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
...unities not only they were not included in nowadays conditions such as needing for a lot of...
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Line 3, column 65, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
... new technology in any area people they does not help each other. People in the past...
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Line 3, column 633, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'isolates'?
Suggestion: isolates
...gy has a good impact on our life but it isolate people from each other. To sum up, I c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1780.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57583547558 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48275819658 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462724935733 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.0633359415 48.9658058833 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.7619047619 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5238095238 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.38095238095 5.45110844103 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265494229126 0.236089414692 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0940871893769 0.076458572812 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100958629593 0.0737576698707 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190178088417 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459024734385 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 11.7677419355 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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