TPO 28-integrated
As it was stated in the reading passage, it is the author's belief that Robert E.Peary, who was a well-known adventurer, was able to reach North Pole in 1909. S/he provided three arguments to substantiate this claim. On the contrary, the lecturer finds the justification of the author unconvincing and casts doubt on the claim by producing some counter arguments.
Initially, the author brought up the idea that the National Geographic Society's committee declared that Peary had reached the North Pole. However, the lecturer is thoroughly doubtful about the reliability of this idea. As she points out that some of the committee members were Peay's close friends who had contributed large amounts of money on his journey. Moreover the investigation only lasted for two days, which is not a enough time to examine the consistency of Peary's accounts. So the committee's report was biased and not valid.
Another emphasized point in the reading was that it is possible to travel the distance in 37 days as Tom Avery, a British explorer, recently made the same trek using the dog-sled that Peary had in less than 37 days. On the other hand the lecturer refutes this one too by asserting that Avery carried much less baggage with because he was not carrying his food with him. In addition the weather conditions are an important issue. Avery traveled in way better weather conditions than Peary.
As the last point, the author drew attention to the fact that photographs taken by Peary support his claim. By measuring the shadows in Peary's photos and comparing them with sun's position in NY, it can be concluded that Peary's position was in North Pole. Yet again, the lecturer deems this idea invalid as well by stating that the technic, which is used to calculate Peary's whereabouts, is very precise. But Peary used a primitive camera to shoot his photos and the shadows are not precise in them. Moreover the photos were taken so long ago and they were faded and blurred.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...tated in the reading passage, it is the authors belief that Robert E.Peary, who was a w...
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Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Peary
... it is the authors belief that Robert E.Peary, who was a well-known adventurer, was a...
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Line 3, column 220, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ful about the reliability of this idea. As she points out that some of the committ...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ty of this idea. As she points out that some of the committee members were Peays close frie...
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Line 3, column 357, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
... large amounts of money on his journey. Moreover the investigation only lasted for two d...
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Line 3, column 423, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... only lasted for two days, which is not a enough time to examine the consistency ...
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Line 5, column 374, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... was not carrying his food with him. In addition the weather conditions are an important...
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Line 7, column 500, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...nd the shadows are not precise in them. Moreover the photos were taken so long ago and t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, moreover, so, well, as to, in addition, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 10.4613686534 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 7.30242825607 110% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 12.0772626932 116% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 30.3222958057 125% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1640.0 1373.03311258 119% => OK
No of words: 335.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89552238806 5.08290768461 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55321444213 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 145.348785872 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570149253731 0.540411800872 106% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 419.366225166 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 13.0662251656 130% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 21.2450331126 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.0893768322 49.2860985944 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.4705882353 110.228320801 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7058823529 21.698381199 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.41176470588 7.06452816374 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 4.19205298013 191% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 4.33554083885 185% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.432262843599 0.272083759551 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118016243867 0.0996497079465 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0914074180395 0.0662205650399 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.236760247995 0.162205337803 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0524088134772 0.0443174109184 118% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.3589403974 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 53.8541721854 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 12.2367328918 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 63.6247240618 135% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.498013245 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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