TPO-28 Integrated Writing
Robert E. Peary was a well-known adventurer and arctic explorer who in 1909 set out to reach the North Pole. When he returned from the expedition, he claimed to have reached the pole on April 7, 1909. This report made him into an international celebrity. Though some historians have expressed doubts that Peary did in fact reach the North Pole, three arguments provide strong support for the truth of Peary's claim. First, the National Geographic Society put together a committee that was instructed to conduct a thorough investigation of Peary's records and equipment. At the end of the investigation, the committee concluded that Peary's accounts were consistent and persuasive and declared that he had indeed reached the North Pole. Second, a recent expedition provides support for Peary's claim that he reached the North Pole in only 37 days after setting out from Ellesmere Island off the coast of Greenland. Skeptics used to argue that Peary could not have traveled that fast, since even modern snowmobiles take longer to cover the same distance. However, a British explorer named Tom Avery recently made the same trek in less than 37 days. In fact, Avery used the same kind of dogsled and the same number and breed of dogs as Peary had. Thus, Peary's claims are not impossible, and he very well might have been telling the truth. Third, there are photographs taken by Peary that support his claim to have reached the North Pole. Measuring the shadows in Peary's photographs makes it possible to calculate the Surf s position in the sun. The Surf s position established from the photographs corresponds exactly to the Surf s position as it should have been at the North Pole on that day. This provides strong evidence that Peary reached the North Pole and took the photographs there.
The reading and the lecture are about Robert E. Peary. In the reading claims that he indeed reached to the north pole and provides three reasons for it. However, the professor in the lecture refutes those assumptions and avers that all of the rationals are not convincing to prove that Peary were reached North pole.
First of all, the reading states that since a committee from National Geographic Society checked and declared that Peary had reached the North pole, so it's true. The lecturer, on the other hand, rebuts this point by claiming that this assessment was bias, and it had done by providing a lot of money. Moreover, the examination was held within two days, and did not check every document clearly. Therefore, people should not rely on the report published by National Geographic Society.
Secondly, the writer analogies Peary journey with Tom Avery travel to the the north pole to justify the point that it was impossible to reach the North Pole in only 37 days. Since Avery's dogsled was very similar to Peary's a dogsled and Avery able to reach that position in less than 37 days, it's not impossible for Peary to went there within the same time period. On the contrary, the professor Provides two important discriminations between Peary and Avery. The first one is that unlike Peary, Avery had not carry foods since his food was provided from an airplane. The second difference is the weather conditions; Avery traveled in a good weather condition; however, Peary had not such amiable weather condition to reach so quickly.
Finally, the reading claims that since the analysis of photographs captured by Peary indicated a location in the North pole, it's true that Peary reached and took photographs from that location. However, the professor proves it as a false assumption by saying that Peary's chemora was very old style and did not able to capture clearly any picture which is one of the important parameter to analogy photographs to identify the location. He also avers that most of the pictures were faded and did not provide clear sunlight indication which need to assessment it. Therefore, photographs couldn't clarify his journey.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...efutes those assumptions and avers that all of the rationals are not convincing to prove t...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'convince' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
...all of the rationals are not convincing to prove that Peary were reached North pole. ...
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Line 5, column 38, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[8]
Message: The proper name in singular (Peary) must be used with a third-person verb: 'journeys'.
Suggestion: journeys
... Secondly, the writer analogies Peary journey with Tom Avery travel to the the north ...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
... Peary journey with Tom Avery travel to the the north pole to justify the point that it...
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Line 5, column 71, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
... Peary journey with Tom Avery travel to the the north pole to justify the point that it...
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Line 5, column 510, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'carried'.
Suggestion: carried
...one is that unlike Peary, Avery had not carry foods since his food was provided from ...
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Line 7, column 585, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...o assessment it. Therefore, photographs couldnt clarify his journey.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, first of all, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.4613686534 124% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 5.04856512141 40% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 7.30242825607 151% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 22.412803532 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1373.03311258 131% => OK
No of words: 362.0 270.72406181 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97237569061 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.04702891845 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50671087318 2.5805825403 97% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 145.348785872 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502762430939 0.540411800872 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 562.5 419.366225166 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.55342163355 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.23620309051 134% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 13.0662251656 122% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.3587012229 49.2860985944 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 110.228320801 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.625 21.698381199 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.1875 7.06452816374 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476282027097 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153332444484 0.0996497079465 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.119257523912 0.0662205650399 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.29752562331 0.162205337803 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0558743086124 0.0443174109184 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 53.8541721854 91% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.0289183223 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.42419426049 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 63.6247240618 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.7273730684 84% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.2008830022 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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