The reading and the writing is about the possibility of survive a space station in venus. The author of the reading is pessimistic and he claims that it is impossible to stay at venus. However, in the lecture, the professor thinks that it is not impossible to flat a station on 50 km above the surface of the venus and provides several reasons to prove it.
Firstly, the author of the reading avers that the atmospheric pressure of venus surface is too high to survive because at that pressure, not only animals but also spacecraft will destroy. The professor, on the other hand, refutes this idea by saying that it is obvious that no one can stay at the surface of the venus but they can easily manage their as well as their spaceship existence at venus by floating on 50 km above the ground of the Venus where pressure is as the earth surface.
Secondly, the surface is so inhospitable for human since there are no water reservoir exist there. This point is made in the reading. The speaker agree with some point of this argument and says that it is true that there is no water reservoir in venus, but there are some chemical components like carbon dioxide, and sulfuric acid. The hopes that it is possible to produce water by reacting both of that. He also says that there is no need to import water from earth.
Thirdly, the writers avers that the amount of sunlight which reach at the ground is very small, and there solar panel will not work at the station so it will be very hard to produce electricity. The professor disagrees with this point. He states that above the 50 km from surface, there will be enough amount of solar light, and as clouds reflects light rays, those solar panel can catch both way rays. Therefore, enough electricity can produce at spacecraft.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 77, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'reservoirs'?
Suggestion: reservoirs
...able for human since there are no water reservoir exist there. This point is made in the...
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Line 6, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...are no water reservoir exist there. This point is made in the reading. The speake...
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Line 6, column 318, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ical components like carbon dioxide, and sulfuric acid. The hopes that it is poss...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, well, as well as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 10.4613686534 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 5.04856512141 178% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 7.30242825607 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 22.412803532 138% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 5.01324503311 100% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1469.0 1373.03311258 107% => OK
No of words: 320.0 270.72406181 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.590625 5.08290768461 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.35947019675 2.5805825403 91% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 145.348785872 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.540411800872 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 459.9 419.366225166 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.51434878587 264% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 21.2450331126 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 74.569410208 49.2860985944 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.928571429 110.228320801 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8571428571 21.698381199 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.42857142857 7.06452816374 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 4.33554083885 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 4.45695364238 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.328371428091 0.272083759551 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102801677419 0.0996497079465 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531745469302 0.0662205650399 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187493078835 0.162205337803 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0399136947135 0.0443174109184 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.3589403974 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 53.8541721854 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.0289183223 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 12.2367328918 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.42419426049 90% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 63.6247240618 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.498013245 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.2008830022 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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