The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter, the author asserts that limiting the number of rentals of mopeds from fifty a day to twenty five a day will reduce the number of accidents in moped accidents, due to the achievement achieved by the neighboring island of Seaville which took the same measure. Convincing though his argument may seem at first glance, there are a number of questions needed answering. In order to decide whether the recommendation is reasonable, we need to ask more questions. The argument could end up being unconvincing or invalid, depending on the answers to those questions.
To begin with, while the number of moped accidents is increasing because of the increase of population during the summer months, whether or not those accidents result from the number of mopeds needs a second look. If there are so many pedestrians in the street that the road is too crowded, it is possible that moped accidents can happen frequently. This scenario would seriously challenge the conclusion that it is the number of mopeds that lead to accidents. Also, there still exists two questions whether people can drive mopeds safely in the road and whether all the pedestrians obey the traffic rules. If mopeds accidents are mostly due to carelessness of drivers, the measure recommended by the author can be ineffective. If most pedestrians don’t follow the traffic rules, fewer mopeds don’t guarantee a reduction on moped accidents.
Although the neighboring island of Seaville whose town council enforced similar limits, it remains to be seen whether Balmer Island can make the same results or not. Other factors, such as the road, the type of mopeds, could potentially affect the result. Besides, it is unknown whether the population of Seaville is the same as Balmer Island during the summer season. If the number of people in Seaville is quite different from Balmer Island, either bigger or smaller, no one can surely say similar limits can result in the same achievements. Besides, it is unclear whether the number of companies in both islands are the same. The enforcement only requests each company reduce moped rental, and if there are more companies in Seaville, there is a great possibility that such limits on Balmer Island will achieve less reduction in moped accidents than Seaville.
Granted that Balmer Island is nearly the same as Seaville, we need to consider whether in the future council will decrease the moped accidents to 50 percent. If next year, the population grows sharply to almost twice as that in this year, the mopeds accidents can not reduce to what has been expected by Balmer Island’s council. Although each company can only rent 25 mopeds per day, will there be more moped rental companies? If so, the recommendation can be invalid. If all things keep the same next year, the recommendation can be effective.
To sum up, the author makes the recommendation that Balmer Island’s town council should enforce moped rental limits, considering similar limits made by Seaville’s town council last year can achieve the same result on Balmer Island. From what has been mentioned above, only when we have further information to answer those questions can we put forward the conclusion that his recommendation is effective.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- not exactly
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better:
argument 2: maybe limiting the number of rentals in the neighboring island of Seaville is not the only reason to reach 50 percent annual reduction
argument 3: suppose it works at Seaville, it may not work on Balmer Island.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 536 350
No. of Characters: 2638 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.812 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.922 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.633 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.304 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.434 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.652 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 130, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...of population during the summer months, whether or not those accidents result from the number ...
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Line 5, column 351, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...lle is the same as Balmer Island during the summer season. If the number of people in Seaville is...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, if, look, may, second, so, still, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.9520958084 178% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 55.5748502994 113% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2736.0 2260.96107784 121% => OK
No of words: 534.0 441.139720559 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12359550562 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80712388197 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78024242242 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 204.123752495 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445692883895 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 841.5 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 10.0 2.70958083832 369% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.1053482079 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.956521739 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2173913043 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276450893589 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883190949189 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0796656512105 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16691175634 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0413511204023 0.0628817314937 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 98.500998004 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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