Not all gifted children become successful adults in the future. Discuss.
People like fame and most children want to be famous when they grow up. Today if we ask any child, what you want to become when you grow, they will say they want to become a very famous person. Famous people like film star got respect from everybody and so the children want to become famous. I will discuss this in my essay paragraphs below.
When a child becomes superstar, everybody in the family and in the city become famous also. It makes everybody very proud. Now, Sachin Tendulkar is a very good Indian cricketer, very famous for batting and started playing for India when he was only 14 years. Everybody in India today sending their children for cricket coaching so they can become famous like Sachin. So, Sachin help children to think and try to be like him.
But some children are not happy as they are trying to become famous but cannot. Every time they try, every time they fail. This make them feel sad. Some people become too much sad and then do wrong things like take drugs. They fail and make family and people with them not happy. So, becoming famous is not possible for all.
Finally, I think everybody must try their best to become famous. If a child tries maybe has a chance to get fame, money, good house, car and many things he wants if he becomes superstar. If you don’t become famous, should try to do another thing. All adult and children must keep trying their best and one day can become famous.
- How easy or difficult is it to hold on to fame for a young celebrity? Discuss 67
- A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and materialpossessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seemimportant.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?Give reasons for 61
- Not all gifted children become successful adults in the future. Discuss. 56
- Some people think that the government should spend more money on public services rather than waste money on art TO what extent do you agree 95
- Most youngsters want to become a celebrity. What are the effects of stardom? Discuss 84
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 87, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...he family and in the city become famous also. It makes everybody very proud. Now, Sa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, if, may, so, then, another thing, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 41.998997996 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1174.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49808429119 5.12529762239 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 1.98362374004 2.80592935109 71% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532567049808 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 366.3 506.74238477 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.76152304609 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.2975951904 64% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.727828527 49.4020404114 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 61.7894736842 106.682146367 58% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.7368421053 20.7667163134 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.21052631579 7.06120827912 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184915342395 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714494055503 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0637876115242 0.0667982634062 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122542634565 0.151304729494 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024364470288 0.056905535591 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 13.0946893788 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 50.2224549098 150% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 11.3001002004 53% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.23 12.4159519038 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.4 8.58950901804 75% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 78.4519038076 45% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.1190380762 71% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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