The given bar graph provides information about the different causes for which internet is used by the British adults in the year 2001.
Overall, it is clear that internet was used primarily for emailing by both males and females in almost equal proportion.
Gaming was mostly favoured by men who used internet twice as much as females for this purpose at figures slightly shy of 40 and 20 percent respectively.Women were more likely to use internet for buying online at 60% which was the second most popular use amongst them after emailing. Banking was equally employed by two-fifth of both males and females.
Although ladies used internet more than twice as that by men for personal medical research, this including selling online were the least popular activities done online.
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
1. No. of Words: 129 200
Minimum 150 words wanted
2. need more for summary, like:
Additionally, the rates of banking and commercial (vendor) users were equal among two genders.
3. put same patterns together, like:
male and female equal: mail, banking, and commercial (vendor)
male more: games
female more: personal medical research, commercial (consumer)
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 5 10
No. of Words: 129 200
No. of Characters: 639 1000
No. of Different Words: 84 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.377 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.915 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.331 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 49 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 37 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 22 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 8 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.008 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.2 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.516 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.873 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.106 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 153, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Women
...y shy of 40 and 20 percent respectively.Women were more likely to use internet for bu...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 315, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...mailing. Banking was equally employed by two-fifth of both males and females. ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 33.7804878049 41% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 664.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 129.0 196.424390244 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14728682171 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.37013600491 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58038250959 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 85.0 106.607317073 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.658914728682 0.547539520022 120% => OK
syllable_count: 207.0 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 71.2168519383 43.030603864 166% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.8 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8 22.9334400587 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.23603664747 53% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172247382263 0.215688989381 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102642023795 0.103423049105 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0937812446453 0.0843802449381 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126234616872 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0889081980646 0.0819641961636 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.2329268293 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 61.2550243902 75% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.3012195122 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 11.4140731707 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.28 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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