Independent essay
Mistakes are inevitable as no one grows without making mistake. No human is perfect everyone makes mistake at one or another point in life. Some argue that it is always better to talk in private, while others don't bother whether information present is correct or incorrect. In my opinion if a teacher or leader said anything false, it is appropriate to point out at the same time.
First, indeed to throw dirty linen for someone in front of everyone else is not genuine way. We live in a complex and interdependent world, showing emotions towards someone may create profound impact. While, by correcting mistake at right time one can save many people to develop false concepts. For instance, When I was in 12th grade of school, my physics professor wrote wrong equation of resistance flow. One of my classmate noticed that and tried to tell professor about this mistake, in return professor appraised him and showed gratitude to have audacity to correct him. As a result, he saved other students of class from learning wrong equation and to hamper their grades in final exam.
Second, falsified information by doctor may cause irreversible damage to someone's health. For instance, once I was attending meeting in that doctors were discussing about probable methods to treat a patient suffering from heart dieases. Doctor was unaware of the fact that patient was diagnosed with deep vein thrombosis and he suggested me to continue the protocol of regular exercise. In order to prevent harmful consequence of exercise in the presence of thrombosis, I raised my voice and told him about this, as a I am Physical Therapist. Thus we ended up not pursuing exercise. This illustration suggests that it is imperative to rectify when it come to engender someone's life.
In conclusion, it is worth saying that rectifying mistake at the right time has concrete benefits, it can prevent students from fostering incorrect concepts academically and protesting against doctors who present wrong information can prevent detrimental consequences.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 210, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...better to talk in private, while others dont bother whether information present is c...
^^^^
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...rds someone may create profound impact. While, by correcting mistake at right time on...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 638, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to wrong'
Suggestion: to wrong
...d other students of class from learning wrong equation and to hamper their grades in ...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 517, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'I'?
Suggestion: a; I
...ed my voice and told him about this, as a I am Physical Therapist. Thus we ended up...
^^^
Line 5, column 544, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...out this, as a I am Physical Therapist. Thus we ended up not pursuing exercise. This...
^^^^
Line 5, column 652, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comes'?
Suggestion: comes
...hat it is imperative to rectify when it come to engender someones life. In conclu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1707.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14156626506 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78188538009 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626506024096 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8380074804 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.411764706 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.5294117647 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.64705882353 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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