Mass media like TV, newspaper and radio influence people, particularly young generation. Do you think it works as a pivot to shape the society? What is your opinion?
Nowadays, new inventions have become a long-running dispute among the people all over the world, which leads to a moot question “which invention do you think is more important in our day-to-day life?”. It is a widely held view that the online communication as a new invention is highly beneficial, whereas I tend to believe that one must weigh up carefully the pros and cons of this issue.
To begin with, it is a common belief that the Internet as a new invention plays a vital role in the world of cut-throat competition. Therefore, I express several reasons why I support this idea. First and foremost is that this the online technology has made life excessively easy and people are able to interact with video chat or purchase their basic needs online. Secondly, it can be argued that these days an extensive range of medical treatments, such as remote surgery is being performed by the Internet. In addition to this information, a group of scientists, working at a prestigious university conducted that in the world of the Internet there is a wide variety of information in terms of socio-economic and educational matters that open youth’s mind to new ideas.
However, there is no doubt that using the Internet provides people with various negative points. It should be taken into account that this virtual environment comprising a lot of unpleasant subjects as well as it can be a root of much crime and violence that leads to damaging consequences in the community. Moreover, it is quite clear that this technology has made people became more likely isolated and introvert, instead of participating in social activities. Also, the communities have become more sedentary.
To recapitulate, I firmly believe that proper use of the Internet in order to raise the public awareness must be taken into consideration. However, as every garden may have some weeds, the local authorities are recommended to enforce stricter legislation, and individuals are hoped to heighten their intellect.
- Can the Internet replace the classroom teacher? Discuss your views. 11
- Mass media like TV, newspaper, and radio influence people, particularly young generation. Do you think it works as a pivot to shape the society? What is your opinion? 80
- Successful sports stars and glamorous film stars are a role model for youngsters. Do you support it or not? 85
- Law can change human behavior. Do you agree or not? 77
- If you want to study a particular subject of climate change, which subject will you choose? 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 38, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
Nowadays, new inventions have become a long-running dispute among the people all over the w...
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Line 1, column 273, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
...view that the online communication as a new invention is highly beneficial, whereas I tend to...
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Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: NEW_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'invention'.
Suggestion: invention
... a common belief that the Internet as a new invention plays a vital role in the world of cut-...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, whereas, in addition, no doubt, such as, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 10.5418719212 161% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 6.10837438424 98% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 8.36945812808 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 33.0 20.9802955665 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 31.9359605911 125% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.75862068966 226% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1687.0 1207.87684729 140% => OK
No of words: 329.0 242.827586207 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.12765957447 5.00649968141 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 3.92707691288 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04156465757 2.71678728327 112% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 139.433497537 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598784194529 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 379.143842365 144% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.6157635468 152% => OK
Article: 3.0 1.56157635468 192% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.71428571429 58% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.65517241379 109% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 12.6551724138 103% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.5024630542 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.6213402991 50.4703680194 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.769230769 104.977214359 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3076923077 20.9669160288 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2307692308 7.25397266985 155% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.33497536946 56% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 6.9802955665 100% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 2.75862068966 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 2.91625615764 69% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0295283493532 0.242375264174 12% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00826235023333 0.0925447433944 9% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0167433344989 0.071462118173 23% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0170241424198 0.151781067708 11% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0159492194392 0.0609392437508 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 12.6369458128 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 53.1260098522 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.9458128079 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.5310837438 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.32886699507 113% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 55.0591133005 171% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.94827586207 136% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.3980295567 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.5123152709 114% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.1111111111 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 10.0 Out of 90
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