The regional brand manager says that witthout an enormous media blitz, new customers will not be aware of the product. I agree that social media and other forms of media play an important part in promoting a product nowadays but is not true that withour promoting it on media the customers will not be aware of the product. The manager can organize booths and can have demo of their product in the shopping complexes.If the customer will see the product in store, the sales representative can demostrate the product hence promote the product.
The statement that previous customers will not be aware of the Sun-Beem's new formula on the shelves is also not compelling to some extant. If the manager would have said that all the customers buy the product online only then I would agreed with him as their is no scope of buying it offline.Let us say I am a regular customer of this Facial Cleanser and I visit the store to buy it again, the sales represntative will definitely inform me about the new version of the product and with his cogent skills will convince me to try the new version of the product.
In the last statement the manager says that promoting the new formula in news will erase the negative connotations in the minds of former customers is not true. If the the news will prove the effective of this new formula over the last one with surveys then only the mind of customers can be changed. Advertisement and news are just a way of communicating , the actual sale of a product is based on the quality and effectiveness of the product.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The regional brand manager says that witthout an enormous media blitz, new customers will not be aware of the product.
Error: witthout Suggestion: without
Sentence: I agree that social media and other forms of media play an important part in promoting a product nowadays but is not true that withour promoting it on media the customers will not be aware of the product.
Error: withour Suggestion: without
Sentence: The manager can organize booths and can have demo of their product in the shopping complexes.If the customer will see the product in store, the sales representative can demostrate the product hence promote the product.
Error: demostrate Suggestion: demonstrate
Sentence: If the manager would0have said that all the customers buy the product online only then I would agreed with him as their is no scope of buying it offline.Let us say I am a regular customer of this Facial Cleanser and I visit the store to buy it again, the sales represntative will definitely inform me about the new version of the product and with his cogent skills will convince me to try the new version of the product.
Error: represntative Suggestion: representative
flaws:
No. of Words: 279 350 //need introduction and conclusions paragraphs too.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.0 out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1253 1500
No. of Different Words: 127 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.491 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.509 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 77 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 35 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.32 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.485 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.669 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.166 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ia play an important part in promoting a product nowadays but is not true that w...
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Line 1, column 237, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...promoting a product nowadays but is not true that withour promoting it on media ...
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Line 1, column 362, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...uct. The manager can organize booths and can have demo of their product in the sh...
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Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'demoed'.
Suggestion: demoed
...nager can organize booths and can have demo of their product in the shopping comple...
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Line 1, column 421, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: If
...their product in the shopping complexes.If the customer will see the product in st...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had said'?
Suggestion: had said
...mpelling to some extant. If the manager would have said that all the customers buy the product ...
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Line 3, column 235, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'agree'
Suggestion: agree
...uy the product online only then I would agreed with him as their is no scope of buying...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...ne only then I would agreed with him as their is no scope of buying it offline.Let us...
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Line 3, column 293, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Let
... their is no scope of buying it offline.Let us say I am a regular customer of this ...
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Line 5, column 162, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... minds of former customers is not true. If the the news will prove the effective o...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...nds of former customers is not true. If the the news will prove the effective of this n...
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Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...nds of former customers is not true. If the the news will prove the effective of this n...
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Line 5, column 356, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...and news are just a way of communicating , the actual sale of a product is based o...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 277.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61371841155 5.12650576532 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61030156121 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 128.0 204.123752495 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.462093862816 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 405.0 705.55239521 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 19.7664670659 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 22.8473053892 149% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.8755102027 57.8364921388 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.75 119.503703932 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.625 23.324526521 148% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 5.25449101796 247% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102516794027 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641320177532 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0641245368599 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0712439605784 0.128457276422 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0271824101901 0.0628817314937 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.3799401198 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 48.3550499002 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 12.197005988 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 12.3882235529 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.1389221557 140% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.9071856287 134% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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