It is true that children in some parts of the world are becoming obese and unhealthy. I agree with the idea that this problem should be partly blamed for the increasing popularity of takeaway food. However, i also believe that the role of parenting should also be emphasized.
On one hand, different types of foreign dishes spread through out the world. As children are more interested in these foods, they choose them without knowing consequence about them. The ingredients used to prepare an item of the fast food outlets are of low quality but rich in fat contents and other elements which affect children's health. Other factors behind increasing demands of fast food centres include- low cost, instant availability, and finally their distance from workplaces and our home. Fast food shops are located in every corner of the streets and people, especially children are being attracted to the variety of different tasty yet detrimental foods.
On the other hand, parents are also liable for their children's good heath. Working parents now tend to devote virtually their whole of time to ensure material well- being, which means that they may spend less time carefully taking care of their children's diet. Therefore, without supervision, children might eat unhealthy food or lead a sedentary lifestyle. This explains why close parental care and supervision is crucial in ensuring children's balanced diet and healthy life. Moreover, there is a third factor that contributes to the situation. These days, schools are inclined to place emphasis on theoretical subjects such as maths and literature, and neglect the importance of physical education, which reduces their students' workout frequency. School efforts to promote healthy diet and engage students in physical exercises are irreplaceable in tackling the issue of child obesity.
In conclusion, consumption of fast foods should be reduced gradually. At the same time, parents and school settings need to pay more concentration on children habits and force them to take exercises regularly to keep fit.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 55, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: throughout
...ifferent types of foreign dishes spread through out the world. As children are more interes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, third, well, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2996941896 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66711552489 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633027522936 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4807711436 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.941176471 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2352941176 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250493730506 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747911552043 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.050437096041 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140874038212 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.02946715483 0.056905535591 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 13.0946893788 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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