I agree that people today spend too time on personal enjoyment doing things they like doing rather than things they should be doing . Yes people send too much time doing things that are not important and necessary this day than things that are important for some reasons ;
1). technology, is the number one factor, many people spend their time on watching television, using telephones , video games and other garget. spending of their time on the television set can cause us inability to do the necessary things in life or to the our daily activities , for instance a man that has project or to attend by 10am may start watching interesting program from 8am to 11am forgetting that he has a work to do by 10am which must have caused to spend his time on personal enjoyment rather than doing things he should have done right. Another one is Telephones someone might spend time to do Facebook, twitter, tender, etc. forgetting their daily schedules . computer game is another factor, a guy can spend the rest of his night on computer and ending up having a sleepless night which means he has been doing things he like doing rather than doing things he should be doing.
2). Social life, this is another factor where people spend their time doings that are not important rather than doing things they should do, like Party, Clubbing, Movies etc. So many people send time in going to parties, having fun is ok and good when is done with modesty because life without fun is full of tension and stressful . adults like having fun because it helps them to reduce stress and tension in their daily lives. But spending most of time to party, club and movies in enjoying our personal life's doing those things that gives us fun will leads us to escape things we should have done or should do.
3). friends is another factor where people send too much time doings they like doing rather than doing things they should do. having much friends can leads to the ability to be over carried , friends can make one to forget his daily assignment. friends can bring the idea of hanging out, having some cup of drinks, smoking and drinking. having such fun as an adult is not bad but spending much time with such things and people can easily leads one doing things we like ton do rather than doing things we should do.
In conclusion, I agree that people today spend time too much on personal enjoyment doing things they like doing rather doing things they should do.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 434.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69124423963 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56428161445 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.13156028329 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414746543779 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.6041307757 48.9658058833 161% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8125 5.45110844103 52% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.60907970101 0.236089414692 258% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.277895507989 0.076458572812 363% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.249519943438 0.0737576698707 338% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.50691738502 0.150856017488 336% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.154637514972 0.0645574589148 240% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 11.7677419355 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 69.45 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.22 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 86.8835125448 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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