Smart devices have put all of the world's information at our fingertips/ What are the drawbacks of the development?
In our modern world it is estimated that life is getting more easier every day with the help of electronic devices like smartphones, computers and mp3-players. Learning things, reading books, or even meeting new people or chatting with friends are only a few things that you can do online. But what are the disadvantages of the smart devices?
When we are talking about the smart devices like smartphones and computers, the first thing that comes to mind is the sicial medias. A great amount of people have an obsession with them. They stalk their friends on facebook by reading news, or watching photoes of their crushes on instagram. And this is the main problem- a lot of information about you is aveliable and is by hand of every person at any time. It would be as easy as pie for any person to know your age, plece where you live, your phone number and even your interests. Every person can easily intrude on your privet life.
Another disadvantage is that people have started leading less active, less healthy and less sociable life. For instance a lot of teenagers have become unsociable , timid and inhibited. Why go to the library with your friends if you can read a book on the internet at home? And this is a problem because adolescense is a very formative stage of every person's development. What is more, spending a vast amount of time by playing a game on your phone , or watching films on your computer causes problems with health . A lot of people suffer from a lack of sleep , have problems with eyes or even with weight.
In my opinion , we have become addictive to the smart devices , so what can we do about it? To my mind, it's not a problem that a goverment should deal with , it depends only on people themselves. If you dont want to become a victim of the smart technology , try to spend from two to eight hours a day on the computer and if your job is conected with working on the computer or labtop, try to spend more time on the fresh air in your free time and eat a wide variety of nutrients that can help your eyes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, for instance, talking about, in my opinion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
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Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1672.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 373.0 315.596192385 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48257372654 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39467950092 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43953335984 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517426273458 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 521.1 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 0.809619238477 741% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
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Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7586565277 49.4020404114 113% => OK
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Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
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What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520325109115 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670277495653 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0898186323365 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0289638824027 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 13.0946893788 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 12.4159519038 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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