12.Fifeen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade averages at Omega have risen by 30 percent. Potential employers, looking at this dramatic rise in grades, believe that grades at Omega are inflated and do not accurately reflect student achievement; as a result, Omega graduates have not been as successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should terminate student evaluation of professors.
While it might be true to evaluate the effectiveness of the rating system of professors to promise the school's competition with Alpha university, its unstated assumptions are rife with holes and make the author's argument vulnerable in logic.
First, the author begins with the statement that after implementing the new rating system, the grades made by professors toward students increased coincidently. Within such argument, the assumption is that these professors give higher grades so as to gain greater reputation among students and schools. Here, no data concerning these students' last year scores is given to support the writer's opinion. If last year these students grades were staying in average level, it is reasonable to assume that higher grades assignment is illegal. But on condition that in last year, the grades were at the lower, or even, the lowest point ever? Hence, to strongly validate the author's argument, citing last year grades may be a good way. Also, the words, "overall", "average", as mentioned in the passage indicates that the writer could not conduct a precise study, making the argument vague and obscure. For example, for the average word, it is easy to be challenged by an another situation, some extremely high grade occurred in easy courses may overshadow the low grades of courses esoteric. Thus, making a more precise argument needs to contain a comprehensive research.
Secondly, the author implies that the suddenly increased grades may lead to a bad impression to employers because they may consider that the grades are inflated and these students have no corresponding achievement. Here, there are rarely connections between grades and achievements, and employers have their own way to recruit potential promising students. For example, students only have to choose one of their study lives, a high GPA or a number of experiences, which means that students with high GPA usually have no more time devoting in extra experiences, as people with rich background have no it improving their GPA either. Hence, employers know how to test their ability with suitable methods.
Finally, since the author assumes that high grades make students suffer from the distrust from potential employers, their graduates would not as competitive as graduates from a nearby university, Alpha university. The author' assumptions underlying such argument are that either in past the competition of graduates from both universities is relatively the same or Alpha university's grading system is more reasonable. Unfortunately, there are no evidence are cited as the grounds of the preceding assumptions. So if the core competition of Alpha university has a large gap with that of Omega university, and if the grades made by professors are also high in the opposite university, the author's idea is going to be taken apart in that employers may no change their attitude just because of relatively scores above the average. Moreover, the decision on hiring which universities is largely based on the feedback of former employers and performances of previous employees hired form such university. So it should also be taken into account.
In a nutshell, it might be said that no convincing deduction in the passage is given, and the writer fails to take alternative evidence to complete his idea. The argument ends up with an outright untenable conclusion based on wishy-washy findings that are possible to be inaccurate. Thus, the writer fails to persuade the school to cut off the rating system.
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Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 12 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 563 350
No. of Characters: 2884 1500
No. of Different Words: 265 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.871 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.123 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.761 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 215 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 164 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 126 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 77 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.478 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.447 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.282 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.492 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.067 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 105, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
...ing system of professors to promise the schools competition with Alpha university, its ...
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Line 2, column 206, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ptions are rife with holes and make the authors argument vulnerable in logic. Firs...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...authors argument vulnerable in logic. First, the author begins with the statem...
^^^
Line 4, column 243, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hat these professors give higher grades so as to gain greater reputation among students ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 385, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ast year scores is given to support the writers opinion. If last year these students gr...
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Line 4, column 667, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...t ever? Hence, to strongly validate the authors argument, citing last year grades may b...
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Line 4, column 981, Rule ID: AN_ANOTHER[1]
Message: One of these determiners is redundant in this context. Choose only one: 'a situation' or 'another situation'.
Suggestion: a situation; another situation
...ge word, it is easy to be challenged by an another situation, some extremely high grade occurred in ...
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Line 4, column 1159, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[3]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'comprehensive research'.
Suggestion: comprehensive research
... more precise argument needs to contain a comprehensive research. Secondly, the author implies that ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s to contain a comprehensive research. Secondly, the author implies that the su...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... their ability with suitable methods. Finally, since the author assumes that h...
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Line 8, column 687, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...so high in the opposite university, the authors idea is going to be taken apart in that...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it should also be taken into account. In a nutshell, it might be said that no ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, while, as to, for example, of course
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.6327345309 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 13.6137724551 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2981.0 2260.96107784 132% => OK
No of words: 563.0 441.139720559 128% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29484902309 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97446030406 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 277.0 204.123752495 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492007104796 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 947.7 705.55239521 134% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4432070391 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.608695652 119.503703932 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4782608696 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.08695652174 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 5.25449101796 228% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213821563117 0.218282227539 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0565222372166 0.0743258471296 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482218374684 0.0701772020484 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0996625733089 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0593958567775 0.0628817314937 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.3799401198 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 147.0 98.500998004 149% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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