Arctic deer live on islands in Canada's arctic regions. They search for food by moving over ice from island to island during the course of the year. Their habitat is limited to areas warm enough to sustain the plants on which they feed and cold enough, at least some of the year, for the ice to cover the sea separating the islands, allowing the deer to travel over it. Unfortunately, according to reports from local hunters, the deer populations are declining. Since these reports coincide with recent global warming trends that have caused the sea ice to melt, we can conclude that the purported decline in deer populations is the result of the deer's being unable to follow their age-old migration patterns across the frozen sea.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument
In a wildlife editorial, it was stated that the Arctic deer population in Canada’s Arctic region had declined. The reason given behind this was global warming causing the ice to melt and due to which the deers were not able to migrate between islands with vegetation but it seems that it is not true.
There is no proper statistical analysis done and stated by the author regarding the population of the deers in the region. Also the fact that the deer population has declined has been taken from the reports made by the deer hunters.However, the hunters are not experts and they might have done some miscalculation or must have assumed data wrongly such as the previous population data which lead to wrong comparison in the first place.Inspite of the climatic changes,it may be that the hunters might be responsible for the decline of the deers in the region.The deers might have migrated to a remote region leaving the hunters to make guesses.
Also,how can it be that only the deer population declined?What about the rest of the animals?Their population must also have declined for the same reason but it is not stated in the editorial by the author.The author quickly jumped to the conclusion that global warming may have hampered the deer population as it adversely affected their old-age migration methods.
The deer population may have declined but may be due to another reasons like there must have been shortage of water in the area or due to human interference or due to lack of mating in the region.Also the deers need cold enough climate for some time and due to global warming because of warmness, it might be that they have migrated to the more northern side near the Arctic region.So in this way the population may not have decline in this case.
Conclusively,the argument given by the author in the editorial is denounced due to lack of evidence.The author should have supported it with more statistical data.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 8 15
No. of Words: 342 350
No. of Characters: 1570 1500
No. of Different Words: 148 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.3 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.591 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.383 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 75 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 45 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 29.84 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.449 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.635 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...upported it with more statistical data.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, regarding, so, such as, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 330.0 441.139720559 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88181818182 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78876962052 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451515151515 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 705.55239521 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 47.0 22.8473053892 206% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 154.138818959 57.8364921388 267% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 230.142857143 119.503703932 193% => OK
Words per sentence: 47.1428571429 23.324526521 202% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 5.70786347227 195% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 5.25449101796 285% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.138881294964 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0746222231412 0.0743258471296 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473445271929 0.0701772020484 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0838427827043 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611840793919 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.1 14.3799401198 175% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 23.77 48.3550499002 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.1628742515 204% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.6 12.197005988 177% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.22 8.32208582834 111% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 98.500998004 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.8 11.1389221557 187% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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