The writer states that, following the increase of the past three years, the airline will keep growing economically for many years in future.
The argument relies on assumptions that are unstated, but could easily weaken it, if proven wrong.
First of all, the writer make predictions on the economically favorable condition that has made the fortune of the airlines in the past years. In the lucky scenario he is depicting, he is not accounting for unlucky events that could actually not only stop the positive trend, but totally arrest or even drop it. For example, an unexpected terroristic flight attack could make the population of Freedonia feel unsafe on using air transportation to move or travel.
But without thinking to something so tragic, the author sounds the argument upon changing in the social society that actually, if proven wrong, could destroy his position. We are not told how much the incomes have increased, but only that they had. Hence those increased could not be sufficient to allow for travel; even easier, workers could simply decided to invest their salaries in other activities (sports or education) or in the construction market, only to make an example.
Moreover, he is implying that longer vacation time means an extension of the time spent travelling. I can pick my personal experience to prove why this argument is weak: when I was a child, my parents used to have two months of vacation from work, but still we were spending just 2 week on “holiday to the seaside”, the rest of the time we were staying home, resting after the intense year.
Lastly, he used the increased interest of the public to media showing other countries and tourist attraction. While the latter could be favorable to the argument if proven right (still, we don’t know statistics on how much the interest in those programs has increased), the former one is certainly not solid: an increased interest in other cultures could just mean a change in the perception of other in a growing multicultural society.
Hence, in conclusion, the assumptions the author is making sound logical, but with a deeper inspection, they don’t persuade me and actually weaken the argument and could cause the failure of the industry if, for example, relying on them the company decides to make huge investments.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1858 1500
No. of Different Words: 212 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.801 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.579 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 134 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 14.192 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.623 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.165 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...eep growing economically for many years in future. The argument relies on assumptions th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...upon changing in the social society that actually, if proven wrong, could destroy...
^^
Line 6, column 251, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...have increased, but only that they had. Hence those increased could not be sufficient...
^^^^^
Line 6, column 352, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'decide'
Suggestion: decide
...avel; even easier, workers could simply decided to invest their salaries in other activ...
^^^^^^^
Line 8, column 283, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'week' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'weeks'.
Suggestion: weeks
...work, but still we were spending just 2 week on 'holiday to the seaside', ...
^^^^
Line 11, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...d logical, but with a deeper inspection, they don't persuade me and actually...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, if, lastly, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.6327345309 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1948.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 385.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.05974025974 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73362772268 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568831168831 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 80.3056292102 57.8364921388 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.846153846 119.503703932 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.6153846154 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.38461538462 5.70786347227 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.102788729727 0.218282227539 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0378635704132 0.0743258471296 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0550546652888 0.0701772020484 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0549104676124 0.128457276422 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.064501619649 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 48.3550499002 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.66 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.18 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 98.500998004 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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