In the article, Dr. Karp suggest that the interview centered approach will be more accurate for understanding child rearing traditions in islands. The author has come to this conclusion based on the results of the interview conducted on the island of Tertia as well as the contrasting results with Dr. Field observation centered approach. While the conclusion drawn by the author might utimately prove valid, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus the author needs to provide three crucial pieces of evidence to bolster the validity of the argument.
First of all, the author is comparing the study done twenty years ago with his current study. The author needs to provide evidence that in the twenty years nothing has changed regarding the way a child is reared in the island of Tertia. Perhaps, the children were reared by the entire village in the past and in the coming years they have discontinued this tradition and hence the children are spending much more time talking about their parents because in reality they are actually reared by their parents. If the above scenario holds merit than the authors claim that Dr. Field approach was not accurate and his approach will be more helpful does not hold water and hence the evidence regarding the changes in the rearing culture should be presented to make the argument more logical.
Second of all, the author presumes that because the children are talking more about their parents, hence their are reared by them. It is possible that the questions asked in the interview were related to their parents due to which they were more inclined in talking about them, even though they are reared by the entire village and there is no change in the way children were reared in the past and how they are reared in the present. If the above case is true then the author's argument that the interview based approach is more accurate and the observation based method does not hold merit is flawed. Hence the author needs to check about the reason children are more tend to talk about their parent and then the argument can be further evaluated to prove its validity.
Lastly, the author assumes that the method adopted in Tertia will be applicable to other islands as well. Perhaps their might be islands where they have never interacted with people outside their islands and there is possibility that they may show hostility to the team collecting data for understanding the rearing traditions on the island. If such is the case then Dr. Field method of observation will be fruitful as we can estimate the rearing traditions by observing them for a long distance and there will be no need to interact with them. If the above situation is true then the author's argument is significanlty weakened and the author needs to provide more evidence reagarding other islands people to bolster his conclusion.
Although the author may not be evaluating the given situation regarding the approaches by Dr. Karp in Tertia in its entirety, the information and conclusion associated with it cannot be writtten off either. There is no smoke without fire and the author must have had compelling reasons to make such a strong conclusion, however, since the reasons are not mentioned here, the argument as it stands cannot be said holistically. More evidence is needed to make the given argument stronger.
- Too many people think only about getting results The key to success however is to focus on the specific task at hand and not to worry about results What do you think this piece of advice means and do you think that it is on the whole worth following Suppo 83
- Two years ago consultants predicted that West Egg s landfill which is used for garbage disposal would be completely filled within five years During the past two years however the town s residents have been recycling twice as much material as they did in p 68
- The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones 58
- The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company According to a recent report from our marketing department during the past year fewer people attended Super Screen produced movies than in any ot 66
- The following recommendation appeared in a memo from the mayor of the town of Hopewell Two years ago the nearby town of Ocean View built a new municipal golf course and resort hotel During the past two years tourism in Ocean View has increased new busines 68
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 576 350
No. of Characters: 2813 1500
No. of Different Words: 223 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.899 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.884 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.501 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 201 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 150 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 30.316 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.374 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.895 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.363 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 536, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ken the persuasiveness of the argument. Thus the author needs to provide three cruci...
^^^^
Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: THEIR_IS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'there'?
Suggestion: there
...talking more about their parents, hence their are reared by them. It is possible that...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 470, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ent. If the above case is true then the authors argument that the interview based appro...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 602, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...d method does not hold merit is flawed. Hence the author needs to check about the rea...
^^^^^
Line 4, column 585, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...If the above situation is true then the authors argument is significanlty weakened and ...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, hence, however, if, lastly, may, regarding, second, so, then, thus, well, while, talking about, as well as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 28.8173652695 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2854.0 2260.96107784 126% => OK
No of words: 576.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95486111111 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.56307096286 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54806230846 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.401041666667 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 884.7 705.55239521 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 30.0 22.8473053892 131% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.8039761176 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.210526316 119.503703932 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3157894737 23.324526521 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21052631579 5.70786347227 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152818224413 0.218282227539 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493117861189 0.0743258471296 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0541757295698 0.0701772020484 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0913036289452 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396080896013 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 12.3882235529 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.1389221557 126% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.