According to the given statement, the graduates from the Omega University will get placed in better jobs if the university terminates it’s new procedure of evaluation of professors by the students which could inflate their scores given by the former. However, the definitive assertion made in this statement might hold water if some of the unfounded assumptions if not substantiated in a viable manner may dramatically decrease the persuasiveness of the argument made.
First of all, it is stated that it is the ‘new’ procedure which is currently being followed by the University. It has been failed to mention that since how many years this practice is being done. If this practice is being carried on since an year or two, then certainly there is a need to hold on for few more years without banishing but tweaking the procedure. For example, the inflated marks maybe on the bases of questions asked during that former process of “professors’ evaluation”. It may consists of only the bad traits or biased type of questions for the students to answer. Hence forth, any kind of results of such new sedulous procedure needs many years until it tends to become effective. Therefore, it is re-thinkable that the procedure carried out by the university is wittingly the reason for the failure of the students to get proper jobs.
The poor job achievement by the students is attributed solely to the “evaluating” procedure of the University. But, there may be other factors that the companies consider too for hiring students from the university. It may be aptitude, Verbals, Programming (if IT sector) and so on, on which company may provide the jobs despite the poor GPAs. Thus, if this conjecture is considered, then the argument made in the statement might get tweaked to the considerable factor regarding the career of the outgoing students from Omega University.
It is also mentioned that Alpha university students get higher jobs then the Omega University pupils. But, it is not mentioned if the Alpha University uses this procedure of students evaluating professors as well. It is also not considered that what extra coaching the students in the Alpha University get to bag the proper placements. For an instance, the Alpha University might teach Soft skills to it’s students in a copious amount which might be concentrated less in the Omega University. Hence, if these unfound assumptions are clarified by the statement, then the argument will be a credulous one.
In a nutshell, the given statement provides a conjecture that the new procedure followed by the University of Omega has to be squashed in order for the students to achieve un-inflated scores without making the professors averred. Furthermore, the students getting high end jobs. However, if the substantiations provided- the other attributes regarding the job selection by the companies, the other courses to be put forth and so on- are considered, then there might be a second conclusion on the assertion made.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 491 350
No. of Characters: 2433 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.707 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.955 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.835 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 138 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 114 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 81 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.381 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.386 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.81 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.338 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.102 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 334, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...e in this statement might hold water if some of the unfounded assumptions if not substantia...
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Line 1, column 389, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a viable manner" with adverb for "viable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ounded assumptions if not substantiated in a viable manner may dramatically decrease the persuasiv...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...persuasiveness of the argument made. First of all, it is stated that it is th...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...this practice is being carried on since an year or two, then certainly there is a...
^^
Line 3, column 274, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng carried on since an year or two, then certainly there is a need to hold on for...
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Line 3, column 614, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...f questions for the students to answer. Hence forth, any kind of results of such new ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, regarding, second, so, then, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2550.0 2260.96107784 113% => OK
No of words: 491.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19348268839 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70728369723 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15761897851 2.78398813304 113% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 204.123752495 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446028513238 0.468620217663 95% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 705.55239521 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.9028830932 57.8364921388 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.5 119.503703932 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.55 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.45 5.70786347227 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203100809009 0.218282227539 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721637747078 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583769853148 0.0701772020484 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124907365891 0.128457276422 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370560345358 0.0628817314937 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 98.500998004 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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