“In the first four years that Montoya has served as mayor of the city of San Perdito, the population has decreased and the unemployment rate has increased. Two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. Under Varro, who served as mayor for four years before Montoya, the unemployment rate decreased and the population increased. Clearly, the residents of San Perdito would be best served if they voted Montoya out of office and reelected Varro.”
The author of the argument concluded that Mr. Varro would serve the residents of San Perdito well compare the Mr. Montoya. The conclusion cites population and employment rate are the reasons behind this, as unemployment rate has increased while population rate has decreased during the era of Mr. Montoya. Whereas during era of Mr. Varro, it was completely opposite. This has arguments several weak assumptions; hence, argument is flawed and unsubstantiated.
Firstly, the major flaw in this argument is the comparison of data in term of rate, not in term of absolute value. For instance, population size in Montoya’s era is, let’s say, 1000 and decreased at a rate of 10% and unemployment rate, let’s say, increased at rate of 5%. Then, absolute values are 100 and 50 respectively, that means ratio of decrease population vs decrease 100/50=2. Similarly if in Varro's era population size is, let's say, 10000 and increased at a rate of 10% and unemployment rate, let's say, decreased at rate of 5%. Then absolute values are 1000 and 500 respectively, that means ratio of increase population vs decrease 1000/500= 2. Therefore, without absolute value it is hard to predict the right person.
Secondly, the argument says that during Mr. Montoya’s era two businesses have closed for each new business that has opened. However, there is no evidence what happened during Mr. Varro's ruling. Without any specific value, it will be unwise to conclude Mr. Montoya is not a better candidate than Mr. Varro for the citizen of San Perdito.
The argument is flawed due to the reasons mentioned above, and hence remains unconvincing. However, had the author mentioned required data, the argument could have been strengthened.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 283 350
No. of Characters: 1383 1500
No. of Different Words: 132 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.102 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.887 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.757 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 96 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 79 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.867 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.376 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.933 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.585 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.076 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 401, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...crease population vs decrease 100/50=2. Similarly if in Varros era population size is, le...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, then, therefore, well, whereas, while, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.9520958084 23% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 28.8173652695 38% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 55.5748502994 63% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 2260.96107784 65% => OK
No of words: 280.0 441.139720559 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23214285714 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.56307096286 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93933344867 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.507142857143 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.1660189514 57.8364921388 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.6666666667 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.70786347227 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269696380503 0.218282227539 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866006333866 0.0743258471296 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0934294290903 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14797211731 0.128457276422 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0846514496251 0.0628817314937 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.3799401198 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 98.500998004 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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