Five years ago, at a time when we had difficulties in obtaining reliable supplies of high quality wool fabric, we discontinued production of our alpaca overcoat. Now that we have a new fabric supplier, we should resume production. This coat should sell very well: since we have not offered an alpaca overcoat for five years and since our major competitor no longer makes an alpaca overcoat, there will be pent-up customer demand. Also, since the price of most types of clothing has increased in each of the past five years, customers should be willing to pay significantly higher prices for alpaca overcoats than they did five years ago, and our company profits will increase."
This is a modern era. All of the people wants to wear new and fashionable dresses. In this argument, author argues that recovering the old alpaca overcoat will take the advantages business. This looks like a simple and easy going idea but in fact it is not that simple as explained by this prompt. There are several unforeseen aspects in the argument. Hence the argument is not cogent.
First of all, the first flaw in the assumption is that author compare the two different time with same eye. Which is completely ridiculous: there is no any persuasive evidence. During the five years time period man attitude and behavior is completely changed. Perhaps their choice also be changed. Author could not discuss about this thing. Moreover, what type of that alpaca overcoat? How much price was declared before the 5 years ago.
Secondly, the second and still weak assumption is that there is piles of demand: they had not taken any order. Even if it is true; it creates the disgruntle towards our company. Customer only care about the product not the company. Clothes are the fundamental things, always needed for man, customers may change the choice of company. Which makes the loss for the company.
Finally, third and totally foolhardy thought is that there is no other competition; author's company only make the good product. This type of panorama is better only if customer makes that comments. This is the era of competition; anyone can give challenge to that company. Author should concerned with these details. What are the major factors to get the profit? Serious calculation of the details like as: customer choice, validity of product, demand of the market, only determined the profit of company.
To recapitulate, in order to get the profit, details calculation, more discussion is needed. It is better to make new research with minor details because current argument rife with many holes in an assumption.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 23, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: All the
This is a modern era. All of the people wants to wear new and fashionabl...
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Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...ral unforeseen aspects in the argument. Hence the argument is not cogent. First of a...
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Line 2, column 149, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...hich is completely ridiculous: there is no any persuasive evidence. During the fiv...
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Line 3, column 56, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'there are piles'?
Suggestion: there are piles
...econd and still weak assumption is that there is piles of demand: they had not taken any order...
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Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...y order. Even if it is true; it creates the disgruntle towards our company. Customer only care...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, if, look, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, third, in fact, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 321.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98442367601 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53601689328 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 204.123752495 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585669781931 0.468620217663 125% => OK
syllable_count: 505.8 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 22.8473053892 53% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.5223864638 57.8364921388 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 61.5384615385 119.503703932 51% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.3461538462 23.324526521 53% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.096979623549 0.218282227539 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0254230889074 0.0743258471296 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0229794028196 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0487024664401 0.128457276422 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256698986719 0.0628817314937 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 14.3799401198 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.3 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 12.197005988 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.72 12.5979740519 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 12.3882235529 48% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 11.1389221557 61% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.9071856287 67% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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