A folk remedy for insomnia, the scent in lavender flowers, has now been proved effective. In a recent study, 30 volunteers with chronic insomnia slept each night for three weeks on lavender-scented pillows in a controlled room where their sleep was monitored. During the first week, volunteers continued to take their usual sleeping medication. They slept soundly but wakened feeling tired. During the second week, the volunteers discontinued their medication. As a result, they slept less soundly than the previous week and felt even more tired. During the third week, the volunteers slept longer and more soundly than in the previous two weeks. This shows that over a short period of time lavender cures insomnia
The writer talks about the effectiveness of the scent in lavender flowers which is used to
cure the disease-chronic insomnia. The study that was carried out on the group of people and the
analysis was observed that to what extent lavender scent can cure chronic insomnia. Further, writer
mentions that the analysis which was carried out on people were medicated in the first week and
the medication was discontinued in the succeeding week. Thus, the writer mentions that lavender
scent can cure chronic insomnia in a shorter period of time.
As mentioned in the above scenario, the research was carried out on 30 volunteers who
faced chronic insomnia and their sleep was monitored. Here, writer has nowhere mentioned that
the people who were volunteered for chronic insomnia belonged to which age group. Further, the
writer fails to mention that these volunteers were working and had stress or were retired seniors.
The writer also fails to mention that all these volunteers were the resident in the same climatic
environment. Thus, the writer has not considered the possible factors which can lead to suffer
volunteers from chronic insomnia.
The writers has carried out the study research on 30 volunteers during the first week. The
volunteers which were being monitored were on medication and continued their medication for
the first week along with the lavender scent on the pillow. Firstly, the writer has not mentioned
that all volunteers which were being examined were on medication. As mentioned in the above
passage, the writer failed to discuss volunteer’s age group as a pivot factor. After continuing the
medication plus the lavender scent the volunteers were able to sleep soundly but felt tiredness
while waking up. Though lavender scent may be helpful for them to sleep soundly but it can be
because of the medication that would have caused the volunteers experience tiredness while
waking up. The research was continued for the second week too but without medication, the
volunteers experienced less sounded sleep and more tiredness while waking up. This can the reason
that the volunteers might have not been monitored in the same environment where they were
examined the preceding week. The environment in which they were kept might not be as soothing
as compared to the first week’s environment. The volunteers might be on medication for the
chronic insomnia and therefore not consuming the medicines might disturb their sleep. The
volunteers who were on medication might be addicted to the medicines and because of these
reasons they might have experienced less sounded sleep and more tiredness in the morning. Here,
the writer has not discussed about the how was controlled room environment and the type of
medication the volunteers were on.
Further, the writer has mentioned that the volunteers have responded well in the third week.
The writer has not discussed that this was because of the lavender therapy alone or lavender therapy
along with the medication that the volunteers were on. Furthermore, the writer has concluded that
lavender therapy is effective in a shorter period of time but today’s science is so advanced that if
lavender was the sole reason for the volunteers to cure from chronic insomnia then the scientist
would have made a significant use in the medicines for curing the chronic insomniac patients.
Hence, after looking at all the possible factors it weakens the argument because the writer
has not taken the significant factors into consideration that lavender scent is the reason for curing
of the chronic insomniac patients.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 581 350
No. of Characters: 2955 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.91 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.086 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.619 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 210 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 172 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 120 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 78 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.238 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.551 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.207 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 46, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... can cure chronic insomnia in a shorter period of time. As mentioned in the above scenario,...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 16, column 13, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[1]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...s from chronic insomnia. The writers has carried out the study research on 30 vo...
^^^
Line 26, column 90, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... in the same environment where they were examined the preceding week. The environ...
^^^
Line 29, column 87, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he medicines might disturb their sleep. The volunteers who were on medication migh...
^^^
Line 32, column 36, Rule ID: THE_HOW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'how'?
Suggestion: how
...re, the writer has not discussed about the how was controlled room environment and the...
^^^^^^^
Line 38, column 44, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ender therapy is effective in a shorter period of time but today's science is so advanced...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, hence, if, look, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 37.0 19.6327345309 188% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 11.1786427146 143% => OK
Relative clauses : 27.0 13.6137724551 198% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 55.5748502994 119% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 16.3942115768 134% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3094.0 2260.96107784 137% => OK
No of words: 581.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32530120482 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90957651803 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7074004856 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 204.123752495 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.333907056799 0.468620217663 71% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 920.7 705.55239521 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 23.0 8.76447105788 262% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 8.0 2.70958083832 295% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4889658082 57.8364921388 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.76 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.24 23.324526521 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 40.0 5.15768463074 776% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.67664670659 278% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299102672182 0.218282227539 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111940714116 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656436756962 0.0701772020484 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0934286983337 0.128457276422 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065878446584 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.32208582834 87% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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