The following appeared in a letter to the editor of the Balmer Island Gazette.
"On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter, it is proposed that reducing the number of mopeds rented by the Balmer Island's rental companies will result in a reduction of the frequency of accidents. While it is possible that the plan will work as stated, this argument hinges on several other assumptions of dubious currency. Most strikingly, the argument assumes that the collision between the mopeds and pedestrian is a major reason of accident where there may be various other vehicles causing accidents. Also, it is worth questioning whether restricting only the mopeds rented by rental companies would yield the predicted result or not. Furthermore, the argument merely assumes that the same plan will work for Balmer as it worked for Seaville.
To begin with, the letter writer seems too certain about the linear causal relation in between the number of mopeds and accident, but there is no data or survey results as evidence that support the causation. If mopeds is not the major reason of road accidents, then reducing the number of those will not effectively reduce the number of accidents.
Secondly, the writer appears to believe that by restricting the number of mopeds by the rental companies only will reduce the number of accidents. But, he fails to consider the private or public owned mopeds and did not provide any bar on those. If mopeds by rented companies are limited by 50%, but the increased population starts to use it even more, then the plan will not definitely bear any significance.
And finally, the writer takes for granted that the efficacy of the plan will be same for both the cities- Seaville and Balmar, however, in practical, they might be completely different in terms functionality. We do not know the demography, structure of Seaville, the life-style of its citizen could be also different from that of Balmer's. May be the population is far less in Seaville and there are no other means of transportation. These factors play a crucial role in imposing any new plan for a particular city.
While it may ultimately be the case that the plan will reduce the number of accidents in the city of Balmer, we cannot conclude this from the argument where it stands now. There are simply too many unexplored avenues like justifying the causation of accident and limiting private owned mopeds. To strengthen the case, it would be prudent for the researchers to compare and re-evaluate different aspects of the two cities.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 1972 1500
No. of Different Words: 189 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.845 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 153 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.438 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.901 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.589 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...he plan will be same for both the cities Seaville and Balmar, however, in practic...
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Suggestion: is
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... it would be prudent for the researchers to compare and re evaluate different asp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 55.5748502994 88% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94403892944 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64128704438 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 204.123752495 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486618004866 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.6780626099 57.8364921388 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.529411765 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1764705882 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.70786347227 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187098095005 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634564373679 0.0743258471296 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.063959622007 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105650570857 0.128457276422 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0315208198664 0.0628817314937 50% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 12.3882235529 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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