The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The letter concludes to ban skateboarding to attract more customers so that the central plaza get its glory back. And to justify this conclusion it points out that skateboarders are nearly the only people around central plaza, the plaza is littered and its property is damaged.further the letter points out that many central plaza owners think that ban of skateboarding will increase the shoppers in central plaza. This argument is flawed in several critical respects.
First,the editorial falsely assumes that ban of skateboarding is sufficient and necessary condition to achieve their objective. Perhaps the city can achieve its objective by other means al well-for example ,by creating a new park that attracts the skateboarders. Even if banning skateboarders is necessary, the author has not shown that banning skateboarders is sufficient and adequate to bring back the shoppers. Assuming that plaza's reputation is now tarnished and enticing shoppers back would require to clean the litter and graffities, promoting the plaza to the public, or opening famous food chains in the plaza.
Secondly, the author of the letter hastily states that ban of skateboarders will attract more shoppers rather than some other phenomenon. perhaps the plaza's old appeal was because of the showroom or food plaza which has been closed now. Litter and vandalism could be the reason of less shoppers now in the plaza which has been defiled by the shoppers itself. Or perhaps the crime rate has increased near the central plaza which led to the decrease of shoppers. Without ruling out these alternatives, the author cannot convince me that the skateboarding ban would reverse the decline.
Thirdly, what if the skateboarders might have started coming to the central plaza due to the decrease of shoppers in the plaza and the author might be confusing cause with effect. It is the possibility because skateboarding is mostly enjoyed where there are fewer pedestrians.
Fourth, it is unreasonable of the central plaza owners for saying that it will augment their sales by banning skateboarders by not giving any convincing conclusion. There might be personal grudge between the central plaza owners and skateboarders due to which the owners want the ban of the skateboarding. the owners should focus on promoting the plaza and making a clean and fun environment to increase the adults and children rather than giving unconvincing causes.
Finally, I would say that skateboarding is an enjoyable activity which would attract children and adults to the plaza rather than eschewing them. continuing this activity might also achieve the author's goals.
In sum, the argument is not convincing. To strengthen it author must provide strong and clear evidence that skateboarding, and not other activities is the cause for decline in the shoppers in the central plaza. The author must also convince me that no alternative means of restoring the glory of the plaza is available.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'finally', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'then', 'third', 'thirdly', 'well', 'for example']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.235632183908 0.25644967241 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.172413793103 0.15541462614 111% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0862068965517 0.0836205057962 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0536398467433 0.0520304965353 103% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0287356321839 0.0272364105082 106% => OK
Prepositions: 0.105363984674 0.125424944231 84% => OK
Participles: 0.0651340996169 0.0416121511921 157% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.92775430682 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0268199233716 0.026700313972 100% => OK
Particles: 0.00766283524904 0.001811407834 423% => OK
Determiners: 0.116858237548 0.113004496875 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0325670498084 0.0255425247493 128% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0153256704981 0.0127820249294 120% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2990.0 2731.13054187 109% => OK
No of words: 473.0 446.07635468 106% => OK
Chars per words: 6.32135306554 6.12365571057 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.57801047555 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.401691331924 0.378187486979 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.298097251586 0.287650121315 104% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.202959830867 0.208842608468 97% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.131078224101 0.135150697306 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92775430682 2.79052419416 105% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 207.018472906 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452431289641 0.469332199767 96% => OK
Word variations: 50.8468324231 52.1807786196 97% => OK
How many sentences: 22.0 20.039408867 110% => OK
Sentence length: 21.5 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6973651569 57.7814097925 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.909090909 141.986410481 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 23.2022227129 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.545454545455 0.724660767414 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.14285714286 136% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 3.58251231527 307% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 51.3097251586 51.9672348444 99% => OK
Elegance: 1.59398496241 1.8405768891 87% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.539980992323 0.441005458295 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.141432847739 0.135418324435 104% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0829226468482 0.0829849096947 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.637425464814 0.58762219726 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.144864746107 0.147661913831 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.254605014919 0.193483328276 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.12464467238 0.0970749176394 128% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.429333119105 0.42659136922 101% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.107982654742 0.0774707102158 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.378226109942 0.312017818177 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108273534862 0.0698173142475 155% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.33743842365 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.87684729064 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.82512315271 62% => OK
Positive topic words: 8.0 6.46551724138 124% => OK
Negative topic words: 9.0 5.36822660099 168% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 2.82389162562 35% => OK
Total topic words: 18.0 14.657635468 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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