The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner.
"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
In the letter to the editor from the Central Plaza store owner, recommends the city corporation to prohibit the skateboarding at the Central Plaza so that the business at the Central Plaza returns to high levels which used to be during previous years. The store owner has come to this conclusion because of the issues faced by the store owners due to increase in popularity of skateboarding at Central Plaza. However, before this recommendation is evaluated three questions must be answered.
Firstly, Is Central Plaza facing competition from the nearby Shopping malls? Many shopping malls may have been built around the Central Plaza during last two years. It is also possible that these new shopping malls may have been attracting the customers away from the Central Plaza by selling goods at much cheaper prices. Further, there is a possibility that the goods sold at the Central Plaza is of no match with the quality of goods sold in the new shopping malls. If either of these scenarios is true then the original conclusion drawn is significantly weakened.
Secondly, Is the Central Plaza well maintained by the store owners? It is possible that the area of Central Plaza were the store are located is in bad state. Building maintenance has not been carried out over a long period which may have resulted in large cracks to be formed in the building. Most of the customers may have been avoiding their visit to central plaza’s stores as they are afraid that the building may fall apart due to the cracks formed in the building. If the above is true then conclusion drawn by the author may fall apart.
Finally, will the ban on skating activities in the central plaza attract more customers than the current setup? There is a possibility that the skaters who visit the Central Plaza for skating are also the customers at the stores in the Central Plaza. Perhaps the people who come to the plaza to spectate skating may visit the stores in the plaza. By imposing a ban on skating at the plaza may cause the business to shrink further in the Central Plaza as the number of people visiting the plaza may further reduce thus weakening the author’s conclusion.
In conclusion, the argument , as it stands now, is flawed due to its reliance on the unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the above questions and offer more evidence then to evaluate the viability of the recommendation of stopping the skating activities in the Central Plaza.
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- The following appeared as a letter to the editor from a Central Plaza store owner."Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central 46
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Essay evaluation report
flaws:
arguments are duplicated.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 422 350
No. of Characters: 2001 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.532 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.742 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.516 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 63 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.9 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.842 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.393 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.594 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.162 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 64, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...itor from the Central Plaza store owner, recommends the city corporation to prohi...
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Line 2, column 470, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...f goods sold in the new shopping malls. If either of these scenarios is true then ...
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Line 4, column 304, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...people who come to the plaza to spectate skating may visit the stores in the pl...
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Line 4, column 313, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...o come to the plaza to spectate skating may visit the stores in the plaza. By i...
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Line 4, column 335, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... spectate skating may visit the stores in the plaza. By imposing a ban on skati...
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Line 5, column 28, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...conclusion. In conclusion, the argument , as it stands now, is flawed due to its...
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Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lusion, the argument , as it stands now, is flawed due to its reliance on the unw...
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Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: LESS_MORE_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'?
Suggestion: than
...above questions and offer more evidence then to evaluate the viability of the recomm...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 11.1786427146 9% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2048.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 422.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85308056872 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62060549711 2.78398813304 94% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 204.123752495 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428909952607 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.7038119199 57.8364921388 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.777777778 119.503703932 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4444444444 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.70786347227 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422998803344 0.218282227539 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163347703794 0.0743258471296 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112823098342 0.0701772020484 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.244168885263 0.128457276422 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0968884921262 0.0628817314937 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.3799401198 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.3550499002 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 98.500998004 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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